From a Boy's View

Aug. 31, 2010

I can’t keep the lyrics out of my head-
The ones I used to sing-
About you-
About me-
About us-

What comes after you?
What am I supposed to do when everything
I ever did revolved around only you
When every breath I breathed tasted of your lips.

Look at what you’ve done-
Just one song for you then I’m finished-
Just one song-
Then I’m done-
Then I’m gone-

What comes after the pain?
How am I supposed to move on when everything
was all my fault
When every look I looked was at you.

I can’t stop the poetry-
That you once wrote-
For me-
For you-
For him-

What comes after the tears?
When will they stop falling
Over you-
When every tear I shed, I shed for you.

I can’t stop the ending
Where you hurt me so
Where I cry-
Where I hide-
When there was nothing I could do.

Reviews

[Forest Green]

...I can't stop the poetry...

That is a truly consequential line...very good fit, disappointment and the constant heartsearching that follows.

Nice work...!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

You tug at the heart strings without mercy.
This is beautiful work. It would make a great
song.

[DansStories]

The transition of the stanzas worked for me. I really felt like I could imagine and relate to this.

Wonderful

[Courtland Sky]

i love it. because honestly it true.! you are amazingg.! (:

[Nate E. Flake (Cösmic ..]

I kinda, sorta felt that at one point. No tears though, just poetry! I Like how u changed perspectives.

[Brittany W]

This is so sad and deep, you could really feel the emotions of the loss of the one she loved, great write.