Paint The Sky

Paint the sky--
every star--
one thousand tears I've cried.

I walk beneath the stars
with teardrops rolling down my face,
falling to match my quickened pace.
I really need to be alone,
but even still I'm walking home
because people are waiting on me.
Everyone is relying on me.
Always me and never them--
every time, again and again.
every problem is my fault
every mistake--
All.My.Fault.

I walk as I paint the sky--
every star--
one thousand tears I've cried.

I need to walk,
but I'm headed home
all I need is to be alone.

For every thousand tears I cry another star paints the sky.

Reviews

[Gomer LePoet]

Now this is a great piece of work here Raven. I really enjoyed reading this. It tells a story with beautiful words and no blood was shed. You are finding yourself in here.

[Dionysus Cain]

this is indeed a great write, i like the feeling of wanting to be alone but you can't. you are moving left and everyone still seems to pull you to the right. i like this alot and i like the emotion and the hate that this poem reads to me

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

This is really powerful... I can feel the loneliness that stems from having so many problems dumped on you. Sometimes being alone with out thoughts is the only way to figure them out.

[THE LOST ROSE]

Raven first thanks for reviewing my poem "Translucent". This poem is very powerful and it weighs heavy on a readers heart even if they have not experience this type of responsibility. Thats is what makes this such a reader of poetry dream for a writer to take us on a journey. You have done this. Thanks for the ride! I'll be back for another.

[siri]

this poem is awesome! It is very sad, but you have a brilliant way with words. this is powerful and well whats a better word then awesome.

[Orlando Murcia]

A very poetic piece of writing

you really turned sadness into
something absolutely beautiful

Nicely done Raven

[Art Sun]

Very emotional...the comparisons of stars and tears paints the very picture you wish to expose...life and all the troubles can be a heavy weight upon the soul...we carry them like stars and tears...

nice work...

[Anicca]

This poem has such a lot of meaningful substance. It flows beautifully and brings a tear to my eye. Thank you for sharing your outstanding work!

[Frantzuu]

Great poem, :)

[Emily Paige]

this is very easy to relate to in all honesty it brought tears to my eyes