Wyvern's Flight

What a phenomenal journey dripping in mystique and intrigue. Honestly, I was glued all the way (a sure sign of a bloody good story) growing more hungry as read. From the first line I was amazed at the detail and care you put into this. This is so far a story that is very well thought out and has the dynamics to keep the reader in suspense. By midway, I found myself wanting to know absolutely everything about Araminta, and I was eager to have all my questions answered.. the behaviour of all the characters worked so well in conjunction with the story line.

*Powerful, gripping and magical.. A story soaring to great heights!

I want more!

Posted 15 Years Ago

I enjoyed this very much and am looking forward to the rest of the story...i would like to see the dialogue flow a bit more smoothly (i.e. careful not to over use the same phrases too close together) but that is a small fix and just one of the unhappy jobs that goes with editing...
Good read, keep going! cant wait to read the rest!
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Posted 15 Years Ago

very good so far. i have to keep reading. i'll let you know my full thoughts when i'm done.

Posted 15 Years Ago

It was a very Wonderful Journey I can't wait to read it when it is fully finished!!!

Posted 15 Years Ago

I liked the transformation scene..........nice job....

Posted 15 Years Ago

The transformation scene reminded me of someone turning into a werewolf. Interestingly, the Wyvern has freedom of the sky, yet Araminta yearns to find true freedom. Also, she hates to be alone and has difficulty in coming to terms with the nature of her existence.

I felt that the love shared between Araminta and her Mother, is suggested rather effectively.

In one section of the story, is a piece of "calligraphied script". That was a nice touch, which seemed to add a certain degree of elegance.

The bathing scene was particularly well described, suggesting the sensuous nature of this experience for the lovely Araminta. Clearly, she values luxury and likes to feel comfortable with her appearance. Another impressive scene, is the writer's description of the prison-like room. It is also clever how convincingly, that Araminta's confused state of mind is described. This helped me to have empathy with the character, and her dire predicament.

In places, the dialogue seemed to be slightly contrived and unconvincing. Furthermore, I felt that there was too much dialogue (especially in the second chapter).

I would have liked further details, about the world in which this fantasy is situated. Also, why not say a little more about the other characters? Just a few thoughts.

I enjoyed reading the first chapter even more than the second. Overall, it was a very good read, which held my interest from start to finish! Looking forward to more, Raven!

Posted 15 Years Ago

What a phenomenal journey dripping in mystique and intrigue. Honestly, I was glued all the way (a sure sign of a bloody good story) growing more hungry as read. From the first line I was amazed at the detail and care you put into this. This is so far a story that is very well thought out and has the dynamics to keep the reader in suspense. By midway, I found myself wanting to know absolutely everything about Araminta, and I was eager to have all my questions answered.. the behaviour of all the characters worked so well in conjunction with the story line.

*Powerful, gripping and magical.. A story soaring to great heights!

I want more!

Posted 15 Years Ago