The LoL Song

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Don't want to suffer
no more.

Just wanna walk into
the bright light.

Casted away by my
friends.

I should have noticed that
they truly didn't care.

I'm just a loose end to
them.

I'm just a burden within their
lost cause.

I'm just a switch with a plug
but no socket.

They never cared just only
felt bad.

I'm just a burden to
them.

Just a worthless dependent
in their eyes.

No respect from within.
No respect from behind their closed doors.

I'm just a burden to them.
I'm just a loser who they all just want dead.

Lalalala, they love to see me fail.
Hahahaha, they love to judge me.
Lalalala, I'm nothing but sensitive.
Hahahahaha, just a freeloading p***y.
Lalalalala, I just want to move on.
Hahahahahaha, away from this hatred.
Lalalalalalala, I just want peace.

I rather keep to myself.

I rather walk all alone in
the pouring rain.

Erasing thoughts from the past.

Accepting failures and sins I may have done.

I'm truly sorry to everyone I might
have hurt.

I'm not malicious, I swear it
on my life.

I've learned from all my mistakes.
I've learned from all the abuse and all the pain.

My words are sincere, I swear it on my heart.

And if it's not, then it is meant to be.

Sometimes I feel like I want to slit my throat.
Sometimes I feel like drowning in a box.
Sometimes I want my heart to explode inside my f*****g chest.
Since I'm a burden it's all just for the best.

Lalalala, still people wish me dead.
Hahaha, they still want to see me fail.
Lalalalala, they love to see me sad.
Hahahaha, I'm just a sensitive p***y.
Lalalalalala, I'm just a dipshit.
Hahahahaha, I rather just ride alone.
Lalalalalalala, cause I'm just a third wheel.

Reviews

[KTizzle]

I am not gonna lie. This was depressing and makes me think of an angsty teenager. If you're going to write something so depressing, at least let it be moving. I felt kinda like you were telling me you were depressed but not letting me see why, what it feels like, and who you are. I'm sorry I don't have much positive to say, but I like to be honest as I can.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem. Perfect flow of thoughts led to honest ending. Never good to be the third wheel. Thank you Cahjli for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Zoya]

Aw, this was a bit heartbreaking. But it is really powerful! I can feel your frustration. Nice work!

[Giulia King]

This is such a sad poem! Didn't like the lalala, hahaha, I felt like the poem would be better without it. But still, great job on this one, keep writing :)

[bibin Sebastian]

well done good work. you have enough poetic madness which is very positive. make use of it more and more.

[EssenceofDaringx]

This was very depressing, to be honest. I hope it purged whatever negative emotions you had/have.

[Cahjli Symes]

Hahaha lol

[zaisham9393]

Every word in this poem is truly meant, and one of the most deep and emotionally moving poem I have ever read.Writing poetry is a release so just keep writing and keep venting :)!
Thank you so much for sharing :)!

[Meshalini]

It's very emotional....

Very good poem....well done

[JayG]

Why would a reader want to know that someone they know nothing about is saying, "Aww s**t!" in about fifty lines?

You make your point.
You drive it home.
You hammer it into the dirt.
You smash it deeper.
You...

The object of poetry is to move the reader emotionally, not complain to them. If they're to care you must make them by making them experience the pain, not learn of it.

Personally, I think it's said more concisely in the old children's song:

http://bussongs.com/songs/nobody-likes-me-worms.php

[Cahjli Symes]

Ooops. Didn't know poetry had rules and regulations.

[JayG]

Several centuries worth. Take a look at the excerpt to Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled. It's primarily for structured poetry, but it does give a great insight to how the use of language can pull a reader into the poem.

[Cahjli Symes]

I don't write structured poetry. lol

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Wow. This poem has alot of feelings. I felt sad and mad all mixed into one emotion. I can relate to your poem. People like that are cruel worthless things that are just haters. Very good job :) loved this poem.