Heat -wave

...Poem..

Blinded by the solar rays-                              
 Of searing SoCal summer days.
As every thought is set ablaze-
  A melted speech my voice conveys.
Discernment lost in smog-filled haze-
  Of spirit parched in several ways.
A thirsting which  my soul relays-
 Through empty rooms and dark cafes.
Drying up, my heart decays-
  Canteen dry as such caches.
I'll roam this desert, search chalets
 Until the stars have caught my  gaze.
My slightest shift becomes a maze-

 Desiccated by these SoCal days.
The pain abound my heart outweighs.
 

Reviews

[Judy Emery/ Lilly Emery]

A very nice poem I really like the why your words flowed,I can almost feel the heat upon my skin,you brought out the image of what summer fells like. Thank you so much for sharing your beautiful poem.

[revalatia]

thank you very much for reading!

[Coyote Poetry]

Hot days can be very difficult. I enjoyed your description. You made the reader believe and understand the heat. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[emipoemi]

I have no words.....my voice is in my awe!!!!

Well done!

[Pete]

This is excellent. Every line resonates and speaks. Love the analogy and double meaning. Like the entire piece but favorite: "Discernment lost in smog-filled haze-
Of spirit parched in several ways.
A thirst for you my soul relays-
Through empty rooms and dark cafes."

I can't get over this. Bravo!

[revalatia]

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[Matthew Moore]

I appreciate the repetitive rhyming and lyrics are great also

[revalatia]

thanks dude :)

[Johnny]

Whoa! Whoa! Whoa! This is like flossing my eyes and ears with silk... Chalets? That was such a rich vocabulary word you put in there and overall very well worded, this is the first work I read of yours and now I'm gonna read much more!! 100pnts!

[WillaDanvers]

This is brilliant! After your very kind words on my writings, I felt like reading something of yours. The rhymes are outstanding, gives it such uniqueness, something different than a lot of other pieces on here. Amazing work :D

[revalatia]

Thank you muchly Willa :) Glad you like some of my work as well!

[Gee]

That reads so well, the flow, rhyme, a right good 'un

[revalatia]

thank you ..appreciated :)

[Kami]

I really like the line "Of spirit parched in several ways." That made me think....I like when words do that for me! Thank you for sharing!