Escape

A villainelle addressing suicide.

The victory of escape is just within reach

Lining of scars show how she has bled

But she has a contract she should not breach.

Darkness entraps her, becoming a leech

Empty heart- living but dead

The victory of escape is just within reach.

Stripped of her fruit, left a core of a peach

She wishes she could just be nothing instead

But she has a contract she should not breach.

Looking for the strength only life can teach

But there's a raging war inside her head

The victory of escape is just within reach.

The lightness of others does try to beseech

Saving her is not the words that are said

She has a contract she should not breach.

The choice is hers- they cannot preach

The blame of others is what she most dreads

The victory of escape is just within reach

But she has a contract she will not breach.

Reviews

[17thWhitePrince]

nicely done =)

I liked it a lot !!!
Well written =D

"Darkness entraps her, becoming a leech
Empty heart- living but dead
The victory of escape is just within reach."

[Reneé H]

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!

[17thWhitePrince]

Yeahhh no problem =)

[Clockwork]

It is really rare that people on the cafe write in forms, so it is really good to see one of these. I liked your choice for the repeating line. Sometimes I feel like the respecting lines in villanelles don't fit, but yours actually do. So I have to say I am quite impressed by this poem overall. You really get to the heart of what it is like to go through this feeling, and you do it I. Such a fashion that the form does not get I. The way.

[Kaylor Mason]

You are a wonderful writer! Exquisite work!

[Sid]

This is very well written and quite thought provoking...great write!

[Aurora Dawn]

This is written with pure talent.
You are an amazing writer.

[soliloquy]

Nicelty done...you make your readers think!

[Reneé H]

Thank you!

[soliloquy]

No problem. I enjoy your talent.

[Jack Reaper]

thought provoking and beautiful

[Reneé H]

Thank you!