dear mr. flowers.

a play on a personification with a simple question at the end.

 

 

what if i were to hold you
like a daisy
and pluck your eyelashes
as petals
plant your feet
into water
and watch your head
wilt to your knees
would you return to me
each spring?

Reviews

[A Keane Mind]

Wow! I really liked that! It was short and to the point and had a powerful message. What I thought of when I read it are the relationships that we form with people and how if a relatioship is strong enough... even if at time things are horrible and we are treated like crap, we will come back and try to make things right.

[Monday Parker]

Wow, Great poem...Its so simple and yet so very deep. I love the lines
"what if i were to hold you
like a daisy
and pluck your eyelashes
as petals"
They give such a visual effect. Very powerful write. Great job~!!!!

[David Lewis Paget]

Not in a New York minute, dear!

[Tony Hwilka]

good poem. and no I would not return to you next spring if you treated me that way. NO SIRIE. :)

[The-encourager]

This is really good, i got the message(for me) not to give up and to keep on loving what i'm doing! I'm rooted.

Well written.

sola The-encourager

[Wolfwind Words]

That was really good! It think in tells the story of "How much would a person take, just to be with someone else."
The analogy is wonderful. I could easily image someone being planted. :)

Great Poem!

Aaron Maycroft