I Try

The first time I laid my eyes on you, in my mind I knew.

 

You are the one that we all talk about. The one to be my first love.

 

That takes a life time to find the perfect one, to spend the rest of our lives

together.

 

Making everything perfect for the family we want to have. 

 

And even though some relationships don't last.

 

I will try my hardest to make it a blast,

 

Not only just for you. But for everyone that revolves around us.

 

It's hard to be what you want me to be.

 

But I want you to see the true side of me.

 

The part of me that I share to you.

 

The part of me that you only knew.

 

 And even though we get into fights,

 

I will love you all day and night.

 

I know that I can't be everything you ask for,

 

But I can try to be what makes you happy.

 

You're the best thing that happened.

 

And I want to be with you till the day I die.

 

When nothing else matters but you and I.

Reviews

[Emily Rose]

This... has potential but to me it doesn't sound really like poetry so much as a collection of sentences that express how you feel, and there's a difference between the two. Although it's very heartfelt and tender, try using more images to show the reader how you feel rather than just telling them outright.

[shinybluestars03]

Awesome poem
brought a smile to my face.
Thanks for sharing

Best wishes