Love Sonnet I

A Poem by redzone

A Neruda-esque love sonnet

Love Sonnet I

Your words were not of the moon,

or the fire of a Rose song

full of blood and wine,

or of the shadows in the melody;

yet, in this yellow moment,

when flowers climb through my window,

and their fragrance is of you

after a Spring rain;

how may I love you,

like lips in a time

when your hips moved with mine,

and in that hour,

there was nothing,

yet the world was born.

Aztec Warrior/redzone 2.23.24

© 2024 redzone

Author's Note

I started a series of love sonnets in the style of Neruda, one of my favorite poets. He wrote 100 Love Sonnets; this one is the first for me and perhaps I will make it to 100.
Thanks for reading

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Ern M. Yoshimoto

the first of the love sonnets, and it starts off with a bang. this captures that excitement of falling in love and not being able to find the words to express that feeling. as the hapless love-sick patient clumsily stammers to try and get out this emotion, we accidentally come up with the most beautiful phrases. i was in the mood of for something sweet, and this was my crème brûlée.

Posted 1 Week Ago

1 Week Ago

thanks so much for your kind words on this poem, Ern. It is much appreciated.

jacob erin-cilberto

This is such a good start...This is my kind of sonnet...free verse, full of such life...pulling away
from strict format...
and what a great ending to it....I like poems that end with a "Pow"!

Posted 2 Months Ago

2 Months Ago

Thank you Jacob for your review, it's much appreciated. One of the things I love about Neruda's Sonn.. read more

Sami Khalil

Congratulations on the first one; you make Neruda proud with joy as the readers like me.
Beautiful expressions, sentiments and very romantic.
Glad to see you wrote again.