Writing You Poetry

.... more than 50 year promise....

Writing You Poetry

 

 

The snow came down

in rapid fire,

stung when it hit my face

and reminded me

of your final words,

“We were supposed to last forever.”

 

It was one of those Winter storms,

a Nor’easter,

that crippled everything,

including my heart.

It was followed by blustery winds

that drifted the snow

into banks,

making it impossible to move,

or find warmth.

 

It was six years

before Spring arrived

and I dug myself out,

face thawing in the midday sun.

Snow still covered the ground,

making a surreal scene

as Crocuses pushed through the crust,

Daffodils swayed in the breeze,

and Iris’s draped themselves limply

over the fence.

What made this picture

even more strange,

was you,

sitting on my stoop,

smiling that icy smile while saying,

“Will you stop writing me poetry.”

 

Aztec Warrior/redzone 1.10.22 

Author's Note

.... thanks for reading....

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

Aztec in the snow, warrior in the thaw! Thanks for sharing. This is splendid. Thanks for sharing. Frederick.

[redzone]

Thank you, Frederick for your kind words...

[Robert Haigh]

Bitter-sweet, but funny! Our experiences are there to be written about - good or bad, pleasant or painful. An inventive and slightly surreal poem!

[redzone]

thank you Robert for the visit and the wonderful review....

[Sami Khalil]

"sitting on my stoop,

smiling that icy smile "

[Gee]

Strange what drives us to write. For many it is love for me it is loss, that deep feeling of grief seems to sit well with my muse.
Enjoyed your words sir

[redzone]

thanks Gee, I appreciate your comment.... I think it's true, lots of poetry revolves around love and loss... poetry involves more of course but love/loss are topics that everyone knows and feels and what is poetry if not the art of making the reader feel.... again, much thanks Gee

[Sami Khalil]

"your final words,

“We were supposed to last forever.”



It was one of those Winter storms"

[Sami Khalil]

I like all your poetry and style. Very sad, loving, romantic, pleasurable, humble, truthful...

[redzone]

thank you Sami for your words of kindness on this poem... I will never stop writing her poetry, but added that line to point out how our breakup hurt her as well.... knowing this makes writing her poetry more real, surreal, ironic and sad...

I am glad you enjoyed reading, Sami....

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! All true and well said. You are welcome sir.

[Sami Khalil]

"What made this picture

even more strange,

was you,"

[Sami Khalil]

"I dug myself out,

face thawing in the midday sun.

Snow still covered the ground,

making a surreal scene"

[Lisasview]

Oh my god is this ever so sad and reminds me of several poems I have written..
"Will you stop writing me poetry" hopefully, you never did stop..
I write so many poems about lost loves.. so I definitely related to yours.
Glad you shared this with us here on WritersCafe.
if you have th time I think you might like some of mine...
Lisa, now in Spain

[redzone]

Hi Lisa, now in Spain, thank you for such a lovely and kind review.... no, I never did, nor will stop writing her poetry.... writing her poetry was a promise I made to her before we were married way back in the day... and now these poems I have written for her for more than 50 years now, are more metaphor for love and loss, for our breakup since I did stop writing her poetry for awhile....

anyway, I appreciate your comment and will most definitely stop to read some of yours...