Hey red one. Nice piece. I can relate to the darkness and the demons, but also to having someone to hold onto me during those times. I think it was well written and succinct.
The first verse alludes to depression, maybe PTSD. The second describes one of its primary antidotes. This one's brevity makes it all the more powerful. Well done.
i remember this with someone...she always made me feel everything was going to be okay---
but somehow, some way for some reason....we let go----
i miss that...with her---it was special---
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Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
thanks Jacob, it's sad when that happens... I am glad you reopened your account, it's good to see y.. read morethanks Jacob, it's sad when that happens... I am glad you reopened your account, it's good to see you again...
6 Years Ago
didn't reopen...just bop on and check the Writing section to do a little reading...can't keep up wit.. read moredidn't reopen...just bop on and check the Writing section to do a little reading...can't keep up with commenting because my summer semester is just nuts...
but hope you are well my friend.
I will be back some time...
j.
This poem is so beautiful and inspiring redzone. The first lines of each verse are a poem of their own. The juxtaposition of dark and light, demons and dawn, is brilliant. Great language and cadence. Dramatic, flowing verses. “If we face the dark together”- yes. Brilliant.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
greatly appreciate your comment Annette, thank you for stopping by and reading...
Unfortunately I resemble this poem at times. You really did a great job sketching out the feeling involved with not being sure about yourself. But those last lines are definitely the prescription necessary to help pull out of the nose dive. What a great piece...Awesome.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
it is nice to be held, especially if the one holding you is special... thanks Crowley...
beautiful read for me...the comfort is palpable as are those fears .. so simply yet eloquently penned ..nice one redzone... minimal, deep, reflective universally relevant ..
E.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
hey there EN... thanks for your words and for stopping by, good to see you, me....
6 Years Ago
new avatar i see! you look good in the beard and hair cut :)