I Was Told

A Poem by redzone

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I Was Told

Well, I was told,
but who listens
when a heart is on fire.
I was warned
but you turned me to ash,
and I burnt so passionately
in your arms.
There’s a fiery madness here
found in your silent words
and I was warned
your touch would freeze
my heart in frost bitten sanity.
But it doesn’t matter
as this madness swallowed me whole
and I need to know
are you real;
do you care?
Or am I
just the ash falling
from your fingertips,
like a smoking cigarette
still burning in madness.

Aztec Warrior/redzone 12.8.16

© 2016 redzone

Author's Note

... thanks for reading...

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D Connolly

"I was told, but who listens when a heart is on fire" That sums it up... makes me think of a friend who is so desperate for love she looks for it with all the wrong people, and when she is warned, she doesn't listen, and then when she gets burned, we're there to sweep up the ashes. But one of the beautiful thing about her, and others like her with big hearts who are in love with love is, they rise from those ashes like a phoenix. Such truth is put into this poem. I wish that there was a more hopeful ending though. The smoking ash of a burned lover is never the end :)

Posted 7 Years Ago

7 Years Ago

when you are young, there never seems to be and end to love of being in love or in finding love.... .. read more

7 Years Ago

Sending big hugs :)

barleygirl

You've done a great job of showing instead of telling the way that "love can be blind" . . . but not falling back on clichés to make your point. Love the hot & cold contrasts, especially the final statement about cigarette ash falling carelessly . . . such a telling analogy. I never try to make any critique about someone's love choices becuz (as you've so aptly described here) people just don't want to hear it when they're in the throes of the thing! *sigh!* Just leave me alone & let me crash & burn!

Posted 7 Years Ago

7 Years Ago

hey Margie, sorry it's taken so long to say thank you for your review.... I think what makes it so ".. read more

Gypsy Warrior Queen

Your poetry asks all the right questions!

Posted 7 Years Ago

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7 Years Ago

thanks Queenie, but then there are the answers... ash often still burns... oh well... glad you stopp.. read more

7 Years Ago

I believe great spirits live on forever and so does their love and passion.....smokin'....😀Happy .. read more

7 Years Ago

Happy Thursday back to you Queenie...

Papaya

That is awesome, and she sounds dangerous. Some women are so alluring, like magic I guess. They weave a spell around men. Then they're gone.
Great song too.

Posted 7 Years Ago

7 Years Ago

yeah, love this song Ana... and especially the line "I need to love" ... or is this just madness to .. read more

7 Years Ago

You're welcome!

jacob erin-cilberto

and then she takes one more puff, and stamps out the cigarette...or the heart...

j.

Posted 7 Years Ago

7 Years Ago

or Jacob puts the cigarette out on your heart.... and it hurts Jacob, it hurts...

tha.. read more

wordman

redzone,i just could`nt imagine any woman doing this to you ! a great write,loved the music

Posted 7 Years Ago

7 Years Ago

thanks for your reading and for thinking that... appreciated greatly

Lydia Shutter

What a great visual...."like a smoking cigarette still burning in madness" When a heart is on fire, all that matters is THAT second, that kiss, that touch, that embrace, that seduction. There is no madness and no sanity either. There just is, is, well, THAT second. We have all been there....if we are lucky. Not sure if the song inspired the poem, but surely it is the perfect complement to your words. Oh so "nice". Lydi**