Unfinished Poems 2

Unfinished Poems 2

A Chapter by redzone
"

....sometimes..

"
Snippets Unfinished Poems 2

sometimes I think my attempts at poetry
read more like a lost echo
bouncing off walls
in monotonous monotones
of over and over again
blank stares of stale words.
~~~
sometimes I think I am
sitting on a boulder in the middle
of a raging river
of white cap words,
drowning metaphors of
mile high verbal falls
and synapses of nouns
torn apart against the rocks
of an outmoded social system
where art has disappeared in the rapids
and all I want to do is scream…


© 2016 redzone


Author's Note

redzone
...thanks for reading


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As long as words like this are written, art will never disappear, Curt. There are no lost echos here....only brilliant metaphors and incredible imagery. You don't give yourself enough credit. When the white caps are rough, it's time to hold onto those metaphors and body surf into another poem....and you did that. Wonderful work...and "nice" too. Lydi**

Posted 8 Years Ago


Great music and wonderful poetry. Again so many good statements to be the title in the poem my friend. Life lead us to places of decisions. I believe we must know darkness to appreciate the light. Powerful words and thoughts left a lot for the reader to ponder. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I think all poets feel and think this way, redundancy would be our demise. Your snippets are better than many completed poems. You need to give yourself more credit, but then again, you are a poet...

Posted 8 Years Ago


redzone

8 Years Ago

Hi Paloma, have to admit your saying "you are a poet" made my day... thanks... it is funny how redu.. read more
I really liked the literary references you made here, Curt - "the white cap words, drowning metaphors, high verbal falls and synapses of nouns."

Posted 8 Years Ago


redzone

8 Years Ago

thank you Kelly... I like to do this occasionally as for me it helps to have words paint a scene rat.. read more
Sometimes is feels like people read us as an afterthought and even when they do you wonder do they understand what your message is, or is it lost on them. I like these snippets Red.

Posted 8 Years Ago


redzone

8 Years Ago

thanks Ana I wasn't sure what to do with these half finished snippets, they have been sitting around.. read more
Papaya

8 Years Ago

: )
redzone

8 Years Ago

;0) back... er...

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