Angelic Burning, Sinful Yearning

..what happens when you read back poems here at WC...

Angelic Burning, Sinful Yearning

Time stood still once.

The earth spun off its axis,

the moon dropped from the sky

as leaves turned bright lemony

and violety blue.

You wrote me a poem

covered in gypsy dust,

laced with sexy,

lust filled sin,

and I devilishly took you in

as you whispered seductively,

“Do you get it now!?”

~~~

Oh yes, my love,

I get it.

But I must ask,

“Do you get

I hold you like fire

inside my heart?”

~~~

And then time started again.

An Autumn moon

got caught in my dream catcher’s web

as stars ran in circles

dripping cosmic radiation

on wildflower ecstasies

of insanity’s desires

and you vanish into the

dark vistas of night,

leaving me only this

angelic burning

and sinful yearning

Are you still out there?

~~redzone 12.22.15

Reviews

[katie]

'Oh yes, my love,
I get it.
But I must ask,
“Do you get
I hold you like fire
inside my heart?”'

Whew! Damn! This is a beautiful poem filled with so much emotion! I absolutely love the way you describe everything! It's almost teasing! Beautifully penned!! You've got amazing talent!

[Lyn Anderson]

Whew. This one I really like. steamy and sexy, full of exactly what it says -- yearning.

[redzone]

thanks KL, I was reading through some old poems and comment with Frieda about "sin", and this poem just came flowing out... too bad she isn't here I think she would tease me about this one.. lol

[Lyn Anderson]

yeah I miss her too. it's hard though, when life is chaotic and your safe place becomes a battle ground. We have a few "people" to thank for that. It's easy to bully from afar, under a cloak of anonymity.

[redzone]

yes it is..
I am glad that you are able to find your way back KL... and I still have a few of your new posts to read and walk around in... I will be nice and not leave too many foot prints though.. ;0)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem my friend.
"leaving me only this
angelic burning
and sinful yearning"
Some people do burn the heart and soul forever. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[redzone]

You are more than welcome.. im happy that you read and left some words, and that you enjoyed ...

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and have a safe and fun New Year my friend.

[A hare off]

Like a shooting star, she was there, all of her beauty glowing, shimmering before your eyes, sprinkling stardust on your heart, then was gone as quickly as she appeared. Kind of sad but nice to have had the experience. Great writing.

[redzone]

Thanks... she was special and I loved her banter and the poetry she wrote...

[Pryde Foltz]

And then time started again.
An Autumn moon
got caught in my dream catcher’s web
as stars ran in circles
dripping cosmic radiation
on wildflower ecstasies
of insanity’s desires
and you vanish into the
dark vistas of night,
leaving me only this
angelic burning
and sinful yearning

Wow … that was amazing, Curt:) Truly:)

[redzone]

Thank you Pryde... it's nice of you to say so.. the poem kinda just came to me as I was reading through some older poems and comments left...

[Lydia Shutter]

Deliciously wicked thoughts with the perfect song to accompany them. Everything was perfect once...wasn't it? Everything was just as you wanted it to be. Perhaps you have to hold onto those thoughts and cherish them. The romantic longing and the seductive yearning in every line of this drew me in. If she is still out there, surely the magic of this write will lure her back into your dream catcher's web. Very "nice" words here, Curt.....one of your better writes. Lydi**

[redzone]

aahhh Lydi, my dream catcher isn't strong enough.. lol... besides, you always told me that Joisey girls would break my heart, right.. ;0) maybe you remember I would always say to Frieda (when she wrote a poem calling her desires "sin") there is no sin and what is sinful about a woman wanting to have these desires??? I was reading through some of these poems and this poem came jumping out of my pen... "sinful" huh??? lol

anyway, it's a shame she had to leave, she may have teased me about this one...

Thank you for the "nice" comment Lydi, have a very happy and good New Year..

[Lydia Shutter]

Yes, it is shame. I still miss her, her sense of humor, and her poetry.

[...]

How magical it is when someone sparks that edge of creativity inside you. It's kind of like a new discovery or rediscovery of yourself. How it works is really cool and addicting. This is an awesome portrait of your creative, poetic heart, dear poet :)

[Leslie Philibert]

The first poem I have read from this poet. What I like a lot here is the first line of the second verse, the
direct address, that has for the direct address of Donne, a nice contrast to the richer language of the first and second verse. A good poem, well written.

[redzone]

thanks you Leslie, nice of you to read and comment.. appreciate this and glad you enjoyed..

[David Scott]

Ah... Why we do what we do. Why we say whatever it is we say. Why we feel the desire to strip naked our needs and wants with fellow writers; asking for their opinions and validdtion?
Do not judge harshly one who gives so much.
Even when you are left holding your own "sin" in the lonely shadows.
Another may have a creative process fueled by unattached passions. They may be washing their pain, loss, joy, enlightenment etc, in baths of self discovery. It has to do with you what you choose and they should be welcomed to give the discourse any meaning they choose... IMO. 😀
Yes, we miss those who inspire us. We burn in the embers of their once vibrant proximity.
Now, use this burning to find your voice of passion! Like you have done here, lament and explore your own needs and longing. You will be the voice another finds their muse.
Sorry to go on and on... I enjoyed the poetry. Not sure about the word use of "sin" here, but other than that I found your write a catalyst of creative thought.

[redzone]

I know. that was the running teasing I would have with Frieda Pickle about her poems not being about "sin"... which is the reason I wrote this poem more as a tease to Frieda... the "leaving me" was more a thing about not being able to continue this banter than it was a commentary on her leaving WC (which I understood and supported her in), which doesn't mean I don't miss her presence alot, which I think I am not alone in... sometimes I would comment on the poems she wrote as saying that's not sin for a women to want to have and enjoy great sex and she would tease me back in her way..

But just so you know David, I was not commenting on her leaving, or making judgement on her reasons for leaving... And I know too well the amount of BS and ugliness that goes on here at WC where too many really good poets have left because of this ugliness, Frieda being one of them...

I am glad you stopped by and left your comments, I always like the way people read my poems, it's insightful and I learn not just about the poem itself, but how they affect people sometimes in very different ways.. so thank you very much David... and Happy Holidays

[David Scott]

Ha... Thank you for the tolerance. I love Frieda as well... and others who are no longer here. I felt this poem. It opened some old wounds for sure. I am sorry if I projected this in my review of a very good write. We will commiserate together...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh those teasing words, the sensual weave in a poem to excite...and then the quick good night, goodbye, account closed, on account of....it was just for attention...

[David Scott]

I don't usually comment under a comment or even read other people comments often... Here I see a person I admire greatly making a comment of cynicism and judgment. People share their very souls here sometimes... They get attacked and stalked. They get accused and misunderstood. Personally, I came here because I needed help. I was suffering and hurting. I took a risk and shared and gave fully my heart in transparent communication. People can be wonderful and helpful. They can also be very mean and use your deepest sharing to attack you. I left here firms while for this very reason. I know others who have left for their own reasons, but never assume their intentions... I'm surprised you could make such a comment. We all seek some attention here or we would write our poetry and put it in a locked drawer or burn it so nobody would read it. Yet we give as well. Those same writers who seek do much attention give their time in reviews just like you do. They give emotional feedback and respond with more than simple platitudes how grateful they are to their fellow writers...
Again, I respect your work. You are kind to me and new writers with you time and reviews, but I had to respond to this comment publicly because I understand how a writer can be hurt here and feel compelled to leave... Thankfully I got over myself and returned, but I will not judge another their needs to find their place to create and share.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh David....i was not referring to the poet with my comment---i was speaking metaphorically on the content of the poem itself...like a lover who is not sincere...one who gets our attention...uses words to make us love, and then disappears into thin air, leaving us alone and hurt...

i was not making a judgment of the poem or the poet---i was talking about the content of the poem as it spoke to me...feeling the hurt of someone who takes our heart insincerely...

i am so sorry if this comment was misunderstood...I would never attack another poet...what we write is too much a part of us...and it is not in my nature to do that...

and Curt, hopefully you realize my comment had to do with the poem in a metaphoric sense.

if not, i am very sorry for the misunderstanding....you know i appreciate your writing very much.

jacob

[David Scott]

Sorry Jacob. As a writer who has left the site before I was projecting my personal bias. Thank you for understanding and for the kind explanation. Feel free to delete as needed. I also did not mean to attack at all. Simply to explain. You area dear friend and a respected writer.

[redzone]

Sorry I didn't comment on your comment before this Jacob... I really appreciate how you read my poems, I enjoy your insights and learn many things, including how the poem affects people in different ways..

David, I did not take as offensive or in any kind of negative way his comment on this poem... As I said to you above, this poem was about the teasing that Frieda and I did around some of the poems she wrote where she would say in them that there was "sin" when I though no, whats wrong with women wanting and having good sex!!! and the leaving part was more me saying that the teasing around this was no more since she left... and she has said to me once after she left that on occasion she came back to read poems written by her friends so I asked, "Are you out there"?? lol But I was not commenting on why she left... I do miss her very much though as I think many others do as well...

anyway, I enjoyed both of these comments and perhaps my reasoning will help to put what you have both said into some perspective... Thanks again David and Jacob...

[redzone]

one more thing, I will not delete any comments left on my poems cause to me they are a needed conversation that helps in one way or another to get at the whole reason we write poetry or do any art.. we don't often have genuine good conversations on a poem.. it's strengths and weaknesses not just on the techniques, but on the contents, the whys of what we do and don't like... this also helps someone to become a better writer and poet I think... so I hope that neither of you delete your comments..

[David Scott]

We will not. We are all good friends here. I get emotional over this topic... Thank you again for being so thoughtful.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i will not delete mine either...thanks much to both of you gentlemen....you two are reasons why i feel so comfortable on this site....the good people and good poets surely are the majority here.

j

[redzone]

here here indeed!!! and THANKS!!!