A BIG BANG

....what happens when two objects collide, sometimes universes are created...

A BIG BANG

I feel a warm breeze
caress my skin
and tickle my lips
with a swaying daisy touch.
It's like your sighing breath
whispering vanilla kisses
on my neck,
as I vainly try to keep my balance.

Your gravitational pull
creates ripples in my spaces
and gently tugs at my heart.
It's from you these breezes flow
interpreting wildflowers
with a spectral light
and nightfall showers.
It's from you,
the contours of your motion
as you write,
that the stars revolve around.

And as I spins out of control,
dancing on the edge of the world
I crash into you.

Some call this love.
Maybe.
All I know
is to call it -
YOU, __________!!

~~ redzone 6/30/14

Author's Note

...thanks for reading...

captcha: missing only until the collision, haha

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

A most gorgeous journey through the cosmos of sensuality, culminating in a big bang of semi-revelation...it has a lilting summer-of-love feel to it...fine work as always my friend.

[Sami Khalil]

"I feel a warm breeze
caress my skin
and tickle my lips
with a swaying daisy touch.
It's like your sighing breath
whispering vanilla kisses
on my neck,'

Whoa. Amazing feelings and imagery for the ladies in this lovely write. You have crashed into love as poetry crashed into you...Excellent...:)...................

[Frieda P]

Wildflowers and nightfall showers, you had me there Curt.... bodies, like stars create friction and heat when they collide, yes the big bang...oh my! I'm spinning after reading your poem...... :) x

[redzone]

Spin, Frieda, spin .. but dont get to dizzy cause my arms are not long enough to catch you if you fall, though i would try .. lol. You know i love this poem and wondered as i wrote, who is moving my pen? Do i know this guy??

Thanks Frieda, you know how to make me smile!! And crash!!

[Woody]

such a tender romantic poem! and what a spin among the stars! I love your word choice.

[redzone]

Thank you kindly, Woody. I'm glad you enjoyed the read as i appreciated your stopping by and cool review. ~~redzone

[Lydia Shutter]

Vanilla kisses????? OH MY...don't tell Hershey's they will be so upset you prefer them to chocolate ones! There is no balance in romance, Curt. There is only the topsy turvy spinning of passion, lust, attraction, romance....a merri-go-round of sorts. When you are out of control and you crash into an unmovable object, it might not be love, but it is a wonderful experience...one everyone longs for. The romance in this write is multicolored and multilayered and just so lovely. Yes, you did it...wrote another "nice" poem. Lydi**

[redzone]

Can't call it love cause i really don't know what love is, but i do know the feelings are and can only be called by her name ... out of controlled Lydi, but loving it ... lol you know i always love your reviews, hope you are well this Monday!!
~~redzone

[Lydia Shutter]

I simply will not believe you don't know what love is, Curt....if you didn't, you could not possibly write as you do. Another rainy day here....getting ready to build an ark.

[redzone]

Better start building sad to say most of Florida will be under water in 75 years .. Here it is a nice summer day. Though we will be getting your rain Wednesday.

[Lydia Shutter]

In 75 years, my granddaughters can move out of the state...the rest of the family will not have to worry! :) Enjoy the day, Curt.

[redzone]

I am, thanks.

[AprilRN1210]

What a light-hearted, sweet, romantic piece. Your wording and flow are exceptional.
Some of the descriptions I absolutely love.. ( sighing breath whispering vanilla kisses)--this one especially... I really enjoyed this piece!

*on a side note* did you mean "spin" instead of --"And as I spins out of control"?

[redzone]

Spell check didn't catch cause it's spelled correctly, but yes meant spin not spins ... isn't it funny how you miss things, but when it's pointed out it is sooooo obvious ... thanks for the edit ... and thanks for reading ... it was a wonderful review ....

[AprilRN1210]

Yes, happens to me all the time-makes me shake my head and giggle. You're quite welcome--was a wonderful poem:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I believe we meet those who touch our lives by a twist of fate… excellent poem my friend.

[RivuletofSorrow]

You write so well. It's realy good. The idea is great. I love space. :)