6:30 Am Blues

6:20 am BLUES

“Unchain my heart,

set me free, cause you don’t care about me.”

     ** Joe Cocker (Live Version)

~~~~~

4:30 am

I am still awake

wondering why you,

your words

your artistic style 

and Blues

run amok in my mind.

Your jasmine scented dreams

haunt me

taunt me

with “what if” possibilities -

ILLUSIONS all -

they only make me scream.

Yet, you affect me so.

5"15 am

Light creeps into these skies

and still I can’t close my eyes.

I could live with insomnia

if I knew you cared.

But there is nothing really

never was,

only shadowy dust

caught in the angles of morning sunlight

and scattered easily by

shallow breathing

or a fatalistic sigh.

6:04 am

there’s a grey edge to this morning’s light.

Maybe it’s just the city’s reflection;

dingy and humid with hard life.

But I think it’s more

                                                              the realization   

there is nothing left to say;

all there is

all there ever was,

is the empty sound of shadows feeding.

~~redzone 5.31.07

Author's Note

thanks for reading; enjoy the music

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"Your jasmine scented dreams

haunt me

taunt me"

[Eve S.]

I felt like I'm reading the lyrics of a Blues' song, all along you piece. It was music to my ears.
I especially liked the timing thing. I, too, tend to write down the time, so as to be back to it, and relive it, whenever I read the words and feelings it had once brought me.

Deep is the feeling, though blue, blue!

I thank you for sharing.

[kublakhan27]

Wow, to say that I relate to this is an understatement...I feel this one in my bones...sleeping has never been my strong suit, and I find myself burdened with a sense of loss on many a sleepless night...more often than not, I can't even put my finger on what it is I've lost. I could live with insomnia / if I knew you cared...I think that sums up my feelings towards my muse...wonderful work my friend.

[redzone]

thanks Steve for reading... our muse never cares about us really... it's more a let me torment you relationship I think.. lol

[kublakhan27]

Haha True...

[Frieda P]

Wonderfully emotive, albeit bittersweet, and I love this version of the song. Too bad it's not in sync, unlike your poetry which is right on key Curt.

I am still awake
wondering why you,
your words
your artistic style
and Blues
run amok in my mind.
Your jasmine scented dreams
haunt me
taunt me

Jasmine scented dreams...oh so nice, love that part, love the whole thing, exquisite shadow'd harmony. xo

100 fatalistic sighs

[redzone]

I should have watched and listened more to the video/music before embedding Frieda... it is out of sync and also stops at times... Thanks for the heads up. Will see if I can fix...

[Honey-Bee]

Wonderfully written! Insomnia is a pain and yes a wonderful time to write!

[Karen]

This poem is beautiful! I love the way it goes from one time frame to another, each connected by an image -a feeling- beginning from a desire ("you affect me so") to a realization ("all there ever was"). I love the image of shadows feeding (reminds me of Stephen King's Tommyknockers). Excellent write!

[redzone]

S. King, one of my favorite writers and Tommyknockers was a good read. Thanks Karen for a really nice review, it is greatly appreciated.

[Sami Khalil]

"caught in the angles of morning sunlight
and scattered easily by
shallow breathing
or a fatalistic sigh."

A timeline of insomnia and lack of sleep due to woes and worries about the beloved combined with beautiful imagery to create a wonderful effect. Excellent...:)...............

[redzone]

Thanks Sami, I was wandering through some of my old notebooks and came up with this one... sometimes when you can't sleep you have to write.. ;0)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)....................