The Broken Man

He had an old soul

But was born into the new and mystifying age of narcissus.

A terrifying age of temperamental delicacy,

Where,

All the mortals compete

For who can win the most treasured accolade-

A dead, but still beating heart.

 

Because his own heart was deemed pure,

The mortals used

Lies,

Greed,

Arrogance,

Ignorance,

And anger,

As weapons

To try and steal his heart's light,

Because they could no longer see theirs

Buried beneath the layers of their darkness.

 

So he locked his heart away

Deep,

Protected.  

For he did not want his heart

To be destroyed by the demons of this realm

And their need to stain other souls

Who have not yet been touched

By the darkness.

Instead of letting them stain his heart

He stained his skin-

The wings he never had the chance to use

He branded onto his back,

Raked in with black ink,

For one day,

He will need them.

The halo he bore that never had the chance to shine

He burned into his skull,

In the shape of scars and perceptive memories.

For one day,

He will need it-

And his halo

Will burn as strong and bright

As the stars from where he fell from

And his wings

Will carry him swiftly

Into the mystery.

Reviews

[Nolo Segundo]

I like this-- as a mystery/metaphor, it works quite well. [Only suggestion would be to eliminate the comma after 'where' in the 4th line as it slows down the reader's thought/reaction time; sometimes that's good to do, but not needed here.]

[conversations with her ..]

I really enjoyed this poem, and I’m looking forward to reading more of your pieces.

I'm kind of new on here and it would be an honor if you can review my 4 new recent poems (The world is ours, Nostalgia, Paradise, and You) and others.

Thank you and Keep up the Good work!

[Ruth]

There are souls sent here to make a difference, to bring light and truth to the world, this realm seems a tragedy at best in modern times...this offers some hope and peace within its own walls...beautiful...

[Paul Bell]

This is like landing into a world which isn't ready for salvation.
Not so different from society now.
I think even Jesus couldn't change todays people.
Like to think he was a space traveler collecting data. Like it.