Orchestra

Just a thing I wrote about an orchestra concert. Enjoy :)

You feel like just a brick in a wall of sound

But if you fail, the wall will collapse.

You feel like all eyes are on you.

The lights dim their faces, but it doesn’t help.

You can still feel the stares.

The conductor counts off, and you focus on getting it right.

But then you play, and the world melts.

You hit every note perfectly, checking ahead for the crescendos and codas.

You hear the world around you, moving and flowing together in harmony.

You are a brick in a wall of sound.

Then suddenly, you can feel the stares.

You can feel the eyes.

You can feel the tension.

You do the worst thing you can possibly do.

You focus.

Instead of hearing the wall as a whole, you see each individual brick.

You are a brick.

You can’t fail.

The wall will collapse.

You focus more intently.

You hit every note perfectly, checking ahead for crescendos and codas.

It’s all the same.

The world melts once again.

Before you know it, the song is over.

Then comes the applause.

Why are they applauding?

You didn’t do anything.

You realize they are applauding the wall,

Of which you are a proud brick.

And you love it.

Author's Note

Okay, I literally wrote this in five minutes, but I had a lot of inspiration. Please please PLEASE tell me what you think :)

Reviews

[Edward]

A very nice peice. Well writtin. Great work! Keep it up! :)

[kublakhan27]

A work of beauty...definitely an inspired piece :)

[Krista Weiss]

Aww! really good!! Love it! :)

[The Invisible Girl]

I know this feeling and I will feel it again tomorrow night at my Christmas concert. -__-
Its really good especially when you wrote it in five minutes! O.o That's true inspiration! lol Again, great job. Keep it up! :)

[Westminster Abbey]

Thank you :) and good luck :) mine was yesterday

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks! ^-^ Wish i could have heard/seen your concert! Your band probably has lots more musicians than my band! lol

[Felicity's Eve]

This is exactly how I felt at all of the orchestra concerts we were in....

Great job! ^^

[Hester Vane]

I like it. I work in a Symphony Hall so i see classical concerts pretty much every day and this describes how you feel sitting amongst it beautifully! Great use of language and form. Bravo maestro!

[Forever Hidden]

YOU WROTE THIS IN F-I-V-E MINUTES?!!!!!!!!! Legit thats some good piece of heavenly writing you got there!


An theres something wrong with this rating thing! It doesnt let me put a number over 100. Aww shucks

Well I guess this will have to do! 100/100

[Cupcake.]

I quite like this! I was a part of a concert band, so I know a similar feeling. This is a nice poem, and a good job for something done in 5 minutes! I'm sure it can be made even greater if you were to go back and really dwell on that experience.

[Westminster Abbey]

Yeah. Funny thing I was actually kind of thinking this poem through while playing a concert just a few hours ago. Once I got my fingers on the keyboard the words just flowed! :) Thanks for the review! :)