Forever Sky

My first poem. It's probably not good

I find it strange to say that the sky goes on forever.

In a way, when you look at the sky, you are looking at that forever.

It's too far away to see.

But at the same time, it's right in your face.

Author's Note

This probably isn't any good, it's my first. But tell me what you think anyway, I love constructive critism! :)

Reviews

[h cingisiz]

Great! Love that it goes straight to the point. A short poem can be just a powerful as a long one (and sometimes more so) and this one is! Keep writing!

[Lina Grey]

First, I love the pic! It's what drew me in. Second, I think this is cute. It's like wandering thoughts, but it's short and sweet and comes to a point. Great job :)

[Forever Hidden]

OH MY GOODNESS!!! Why haven't I reviewed this yet? +__+

What are you saying this isn't any good?! THIS IS SUPPERRR GOOOODDD!!! AMAZING! AHHHHH This si going on my favorite list!

[Westminster Abbey]

I really wish it was longer... but I can't think of how to make it longer. Just some wandering thoughts of mine.

[Freckled Princess]

The picture caught my eye first, and then I was captured by the poem itself. I personally don't read a lot of different types of poems, but I like this. Keep writing. :)

[MoriartyMesa]

This reminded me of the following song from Journey http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vF1HCMGZ4Ok


Not bad, not bad at all

[afra]

i like it ...well done

[Dr. Wood ?]

there is NO beyond to infinity

[Mark]

First rule of poetry is if you wrote it from your heart, it's good. Second rule is never get too caught up in what other people think. It's your work, your rules, take what you think will work for you from other's feedback and ignore what does not speak to you.

having said that, I like this poem. The sky being in your face and forever at the same time. I won't look at the sky quite the same way tomorrow! Great job. ;)

[Westminster Abbey]

Thanks. Honestly, I didn't even consider this a poem whenever I wrote it, I don't usually write poems, but then I started reading poems on the site and decided this would be a better poem than a blog, so here it is :)

[A.C. Davis]

Wow, I never thought of it that way. This was a bit of a slap in the face for me, in a good way though. Nice 100/100

[ShadowFaux]

So true, not typically a fan of short poems but I like this.