Raspberry's Veil

please,

you’re being pathetic,

take off your ring.

come this way,

love,

you’re never that far away.

take off your face,

I’ve seen what’s underneath.

I’m sorry,

promise I won’t call us sad again,

fine, but

please,

raspberry,

take off that ring, 

we can’t marry.

wipe away your makeup. 

they can see it’s just product.

the worries in your head

are your only flaws.

cry out of only one of your eyes 

cause the other has to see somewhat clearly.

please don’t fight me,

you’ll fall if you don’t let me hold you.

please

let me hold you.

I promise

I’ll get you the veil you want.

come here

and we’ll run away at midnight.

Author's Note

let me know what you think!

Reviews

[Jason Baptiste]

Hi redalia What's going on? Love take off your face seen what's underneath / Cry from one eye only hahahaaha Very original and happy ending Nice different uniquely written Keep on writing you

[redalia]

hi jason, thank you so much for your review! x

[Einstein Noodle]

lots of creative tension built throughout says i! love her name "Raspberry" ..and being the consummate optimist...i am glad for the more or less happy ending :)
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[redalia]

thank you for your review, i'm still not very happy with this piece but i feel better about it now!