Ash and Lee on a Plum Tree

an on and off relationship

how’s Lee supposed to know right from wrong

if Ashley keeps playing that demented love song?

saying he wants it, and wants her to keep it, 

to hold it, to have it, to break it if she has to.

she wants it too, Ashley’s sure of it.

tired of it, sick of it, desperate for it, 

Ashley can’t help but sing a demented cry.

Lee struts forward with a mighty glint in her eye:

they keep forgetting what happened the last time around.

how’s Ashley gonna know wrong from right 

if Lee keeps up that mighty hot, merciless strut?

she is a lapdog

but puts on a show.

she replies with gusto

to Ashley’s monologue.

Ashley’s an open book; 

asks for what he wants. 

Lee’s the good judge, the high priestess; 

she flaunts her response.

when Ashley sings ‘won’t let ya go,’ 

Lee sits between the darkness and the light,

and simply says ‘ditto.’

Author's Note

feedback is appreciated!

Reviews

[ashkat]

You're an effortless story teller, man! I think I reviewed another one of yours and your economy of words is so impressive. It's unencumbered by unnecessary syllables, words, so the flow has a bounce to it.

I quite like the fact that you play between set/expected rhythms and more loose ones... I know purists would have an issue with it, but f*ck em. I think that makes your writing really modern and relatable.

[redalia]

i can't tell you how happy your review just made me, thanks a lot! what you just described is exactly how i want my writing to be in general, i like to think i have a unique voice as a writer. thanks again for reading!

[just is]

I really enjoyed this write. Love the last three stanzas a lot. This is a wonderful write.

[redalia]

thank you so much! i'm glad you enjoyed it