In Your embrace (Too feel you)

Your embrace, it's heaven but heaven only seems to exist in my dreams. (Unfortunately)

Your hands,

Your breath,

Your body pressed to mine,

So close I can feel every line.

As your hand coresses my face,

To feel you is to feel the sun shine.

 

The blazing light on my face,

Is your warm hand.

The amazing heat,

Is your breath.

Your kiss could prolong death.

 

To never leave your sweet embrace,

It's like heaven.

My own heavenly place.

Your sweet kiss on my mouth.

Heaven is to feel you.

 

Awake.

Lost.

You are gone.

Awake at such a cost.

To loose your embrace.

 

Author's Note

I am not sure if i like it.

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. such fierce emotions flowing.. I am saddened to hear that you can only share life of another through your dreams.. hopefully you find someone who makes you forget that dream as only a dream.. either the person who inspired them or someone better!!! Love your honesty through this writing and you mention you are not sure if you like it.. well I did.. thank you for sharing.. and keep at it!!! =)

[Schnookums]

ok so i know i've already reviewed this haha and actually i sound like one of the long term writers on here in my last but i do have to say, i've cried twice now becuase this is like Paul and I, except the last stanza is when he's gone home or left the room.

thought i'd share that with you.
x

[Schnookums]

I love this and as always we're too similar.

Saying that this poem could also be taken from the perspective of a lover writing it about a partner that has passed.


Beautiful as always you capture a readers heart from the moment you start reading, Far greater in skill than my own.love ya Jadie-Lee
x

[Twilight]

Well, it like the genuine feelings expressed by this poem. In the total, you should have said "to" rather than "too". The different spelling here, makes your meaning quite different. Now, some of you may wonder what love has to do with the themes of my Group? Well, it is still relevant, because the writer has taken a philosophical view of love! Interestingly, it is HER perspective. So, whatever the reader might think about love, this poem is still unique and special to the writer, "Rebel_angel"!

I can understand your doubts about this piece, but no real need to worry. Indeed, worry or feeling unsure are actually issues which are worth talking about! I look forward to reading more of your work, fellow Group member! Who will be next to add their writing to my Group, "Twilight's Disciples"?

Thakyou again, Rebel_angel! May this contribution, be the first of many.....

[David Lucero]

Your poem is good! It reads of a person who has found love and wants to be sure their partner understands how they feel. They want to believe in what they have and she wants him to know it. 'To feel you is to feel the sun shine' is a good touch because it reminds me of that first look into her that reaches deep inside our soul.
Very nice!

[Flo_writer]

This is very well written, my favor line "Your kiss could prolong death." Very powerful with lots of passion.

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Your body pressed to mine,
So close I can feel every line.
As your hand coresses my face,
To feel you is to feel the sun shine.

Wow... passionate write of romance, but only a dream... i like the way you wrote this

[Marlena]

Sweet and sad, dreams can be annoying, can't they? I hate it when I have a great dream and wake up and find everything is the exact opposite of what I dreamed, great job, the flow is perfect. ^^

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I think is amazing... this piece is graced with timeless romance and passion, then to know it is only a dream is a sharp bite to reality... but like Aerosmith says dream until your dreams come true.

[Kelley]

Well I like it! It was great!!!
I loved the line....

"Your kiss could prolong death."

That was an amazing line.
The flow was perfect and your stanza's worked
So thanks for sharing.

Kelley