"All the way yet not long .
You travelled and crumbled , "
For you this is meaningful because you have mental images, memories, and your intent for the words in your mind. And that gives life and direction to the words.
But your reader has only what the words suggest to them, based on THEIR background and experience. So when they read, you have mental images, memories, and your intent for the words in your mind. But they don't. See the problem?
When you say, "You travelled and crumbled," you're obviously not talking about me. But since I don't know who you are thinking of, and what they were t the unknown speaker, how can I parse the words into something meaningful? After all, no one I know has ever crumbled.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
When someone writes they might write on some concepts they possess sometimes.The piece might not be.. read moreWhen someone writes they might write on some concepts they possess sometimes.The piece might not be about the reader or the readers might not be able to relate it with their lives. Its about someone's life and her concept about the life and love , about how she expresses her love. I just hope people to enjoy the ambience and the concept . Anyway glad to know about your viewpoint and to express the fact .Thank you.
Wonderful use of words dear Poet.
"Couldnt afford to say goodbye,
Oh but the mind is playful ,
The colours are gone ,
But the painting is still there
Sneaking away- , "
The above lines could stand alone. I like the sense of a playful and hopeful mind. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
"All the way yet not long .
You travelled and crumbled , "
For you this is meaningful because you have mental images, memories, and your intent for the words in your mind. And that gives life and direction to the words.
But your reader has only what the words suggest to them, based on THEIR background and experience. So when they read, you have mental images, memories, and your intent for the words in your mind. But they don't. See the problem?
When you say, "You travelled and crumbled," you're obviously not talking about me. But since I don't know who you are thinking of, and what they were t the unknown speaker, how can I parse the words into something meaningful? After all, no one I know has ever crumbled.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
When someone writes they might write on some concepts they possess sometimes.The piece might not be.. read moreWhen someone writes they might write on some concepts they possess sometimes.The piece might not be about the reader or the readers might not be able to relate it with their lives. Its about someone's life and her concept about the life and love , about how she expresses her love. I just hope people to enjoy the ambience and the concept . Anyway glad to know about your viewpoint and to express the fact .Thank you.
No words in the world can define the hidden meaning of love as your poem does. These are the subtle universe of loving lives that lead us to live. So much to give. Thanks for sharing. A beautiful piece.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
This means a lot to me. Dont be so formal :P anyway my pleasure 😊
I'm a music lover. Also trying on photography and writing. And I am student of science. I like to express my thoughts and feelings through words. An atheist. :) more..