Sepia.

A collage of random thoughts. It's been a pretty bad Valentine's day. I'll edit this when my mind is more collected that it is in the moment.

It'll be okay after I noticed the flaws in you
And I had several chances to change my mind
But my vision turned to sepia
No one knows what your thinking
The colour you see is blue while your eyes stare with auburn
Your dance around me creates a blur
Our heads will collide now that we're no longer one
Someone once told me a story
That I have to be solid as a stone to ever make it here
I look through the lens finder out upon the world I created
And I saw rain draping over the flames
I just want to go home
You're miles away to where I can't even see you
Our colours have contrasted and gave me a headache
I will never see life the way you do
It's just not possible to me

Reviews

[Annelise]

I actually like the fragmented thought process of this. It gives it a jagged, tender edge. It's a very visual poem and beautiful in its own way.

"Your dance around me creates a blur
Our heads will collide now that we're no longer one
Someone once told me a story
That I have to be solid as a stone to ever make it here "

This is really quite a stunning section of this poem. Very well written.You have a very acute way of dealing with the "after" part of a relationship, which is the most difficult aspect to write about. This was a wonderful piece. It could use some revision, but that's not something you weren't already aware of. Beautiful piece.

[Alex Minito]

cameras :)

[Boris Jonathan Novak]

The angst is so good here. I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing it!

[John Stussy]

Excellently written. Differences occur. I am sorry that the circumstances for this poem occurred, but you wrote fantastically, as always. Keep up the great work, and keep finding something to smile about.

[enuf]

whow very god well writer and deep sentiment x