Unprotected. (EDITED)

Looks like the story backfired.

Running back to the place she once knew

Scared of all the things he's able to do

She's vulnerable, she's unprotected; in pain

Of everything she's lost, there's no more to gain

One day, she had him safely in her arms

And later, yet, he slipped away

Now he's standing right in front of her

And all she can remember was their one last day

She can't seem to get a grip on her life again

She knows where it ended, but where to begin?

He took everything she ever had and tore her apart

All she needed to do was let him go from the start

He dug his nails deep into her back

And whispered to her everything she wanted to hear

He knew he had control of all the things she'd feel 

But he left her alone while staying so near

Now, she's lost in this bleak, bitter ending

She can almost feel her hopes and dreams descending

And all he pathetically knows how to do

Is say he's sorry, but this time, he doesn't love you..

Reviews

[Annelise]

S**t, s**t, s**t, s**t. Wow, you couldn't have described my situation better. You have a knack for exposing human emotion. You are increadibly talented. You write better than most adults, so the fact that you're 15 is mind blowing.

"She knows where it ended, but where to begin?

He took everything she ever had and tore her apart

All she needed to do was let him go from the start

He dug his nails deep into her back

And whispered to her everything she wanted to hear

He knew he had control of all the things she'd feel

But he left her alone while staying so near"

Ouch, that was increadibly painful to read. You are an amzing writer. I cannot wait to read more.

[Staci Brown]

very nicely expressed... the issues of love and trust, an open heart with unconditional love scorned bi the hands of one who hasn't a clue of just how precious the girl was to him... yea, sorry doesn't feel like much, i know...

all the hurt and pain you feel now will one day fade away to a point where it's less raw... you'll never forget this, but you'll be able to close the chapter and move on with an open heart ready to love and be loved once again....

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)

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Great poem!
Very deep!
Love the rhythm you got going.

Me Being Me,
Morgan P.

[Hold Fast Hope]

Wow. I agree with C. Froman as this piece is very powerful. There's tons of emotions that just run through your bloodstream causing your heartbeat to beat faster, craving more.

I love your work and can't wait to read more.

[An owl on the moon]

Such powerful, deeply painful words, gripped with emotion that seems to cut through skin and soul. Brilliant!