Laugh Lines Senryu

A day without laughter is a day wasted. - Charlie Chaplin

Horrifying is

a woman age fifty-five

with zero laugh lines

Author's Note

My second attempt at a senryu.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

haha This was great; it put in my mind an image of an overly botoxed Hollywood star who is attempting to stop the hands of time from marching across her face. Then, I looked again and saw a more somber metaphor...the idea of a woman of 55 having no laugh lines because she has never truly experienced laughter. Two totally different takes with totally different emotions. I think this is what makes this piece so great.

[Rebecca Buller]

Thank you for the wonderful review, GF. I should've found a photo of a Botoxed starlet:-)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

haha That would have been funny...and there is no shortage of them around!

[MsJewel]

Love this! I can't image a life without laughter!

:) Julie

[Rebecca Buller]

Ha-ha! Me neither. I'm glad you enjoyed it:-)

[Latifa]

great piece I love it..great one

[Rebecca Buller]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it:-)

[Joyce S. Greene]

How very true, Rebecca. The lines come whether you laugh or cry, but if you do neither, what kind of life have you lived? One without love, that's for sure! I really liked this one a lot!

[Rebecca Buller]

Thank you, Joyce! I'm glad you enjoyed it:-)

[Abdul Aziz]

Truly horrifying. I think you are attacking both the modern artifice of cosmetics and the way people lead their lives, so grimly, so sadly, without pausing to think about the happiness that life can bring. Very thought provoking senryu.

[Rebecca Buller]

Thank you for the wonderful review! I will have to check out some of your work soon:-)

[DrD]

Second attempt first class. Very well done and meaningful.

[Rebecca Buller]

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it:-)

[BillTemple]

Haiku and Senryu are forms I have just recently been exposed to. I have not posted any here but I have an entire series on Wattpad.
You definatly have a way with these forms. Well done

[Rebecca Buller]

Thank you very much. They're fun to write. I enjoy them:-)

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Splendid read and write...:)

[Rebecca Buller]

Thank u so much, fellow scribe:-)

[Brandon S. Whitten]

My pleasure, Rebecca.

[zainul]

Great depiction of a woman by simple words.
Love the piece.

[Rebecca Buller]

Thank you so much, my friend:-)

[zainul]

You are most welcome,dear poet.:)

[Rebecca Buller]

:-) :-) :-)

[Relic's Bare Trees]

I wouldn't marry her, thats for sure. ha

[Rebecca Buller]

Ha-ha! :-) :-)

[Rebecca Buller]

LOL this one cracked me up, for you speak truth through your 5-7-5's.
Amazing how ironic vanity can bring humor, and facts... aaah! :D

- Elisa

[Rebecca Buller]

Thank you, Eli. I'm so glad you enjoyed it:-) :-)

I did :) I did.... you are a little Haiku/Senryu queen on here, I noticed. :D come back for def. more!

[Rebecca Buller]

Aww, thank you:-) And I'll def. be reading more of your stuff.

Do not ever rush, for it's no homework.... :D one precious person teached me once..... for I love you to come by when you "only" feel the vibe dear :D

[Rebecca Buller]

Deal:) :) :)