Orphanne'

Poem I wrote thinking about my fractured childhood; with the knowledge that I can still find acceptance in the arms of my BEST FRIEND....

A crippled, crawling,curious girl,
stumbled into light;
her fractured, hopeless, dreary world,
is given second sight..
Her heart,hardened, and doubled,
broken, now, into.
her manic thoughts, so troubled,
daily,now, renewed.
An memories,mirror, an attack,
by tragic,childish fears;
the smile you see is now unmatched,
caressed by happy tears.
The enemy of stolen time,
now it’s become best friend.
The youth she had to leave behind,
has been restored again.
Her faith though kept; still shaken,
grew higher than the storm.
The nights that had been taken,
now feel so safe and warm.
A life of bitter ashes,
replaced by dreams of dare,
the sorrow of the past has,
vanished into air.
From believing no one loved her,
to convinced that Some One does.
From accepting she must suffer,
to receiving special love.
From cringing in a cold cage,
to soaring high and free.
From leading lady, on a stage,
to protesting out of key.
The mask,hiding the glow,
fell to the ground.
Revelation knowledge flows,
peace can make a sound.
This change came slowly,
and remains a mystery.
He; forever Holy,
searching for..just…me.

Author's Note

Reviews requested, honesty preferred...

Reviews

[Moto Kaligawa]

I love the Carol-esque meter, rhyme near-rhyme and non. Ii is dreamlike with twists as it flirts with various life roles. I never comment on religion, as no one cares for my take on this, but that it ends where it does does work. Well done, and thanks for sharing.

[francinebc]

FAR OUT!!! this is amazing.
It tells such a strong tale.
amazing!!!
I adore it. have you considered getting published? This is amazing!

"her fractured, hopeless, dreary world," Ah! I love how this is described! Probably my favourite part, just thinking about how someone's life can look like this. It's very interesting. Such a terrific poem! I really enjoyed it.

"Peace can make a sound"

I love that.

[dutch2lips]

amazing how the human brain works, put belief into it and before you know it man/woman stand up and stand straight, well penned

[Raven Starhawk]

I was intrigued by the title but didn't know what to expect when I started to read. I suppose that is how it is with most poems and stories but this was a step above the rest. It begins almost innocently and develops into something much more. Well done.

[ScaryTrees]

becoming something more through faith?
comforting and nicely written

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot of story in this short poem. Pain, misery and learning. So much emotion and history is written in this poem. I like poetry that must be read a few times. Poems that test the mind and imagination. This poem does. Thank you for a outstanding poem of learning and surviving.
Coyote