Struggle for Perfection

 

Life is precious

Love is important

We must choose those we decide to spend the rest of our lives with wisely

That’s how we keep from getting hurt

That’s how we keep from regretting

What do we strive to be

What do I struggle to become

 

To be self-reliant in all that I do and have

To be principled and live by my word

To be honest with myself and others

To be excitable for happiness is but for the moment

To be hardworking for nothing comes easy

To be inspiring for there is no limit to what others can do

To be motivating for one must have purpose

To be hygienic for cleanliness is next to godliness

To be spiritual for materials are but for the moment

To be decent for we must not live like savages

To be understanding for anything could happen to anyone

To be humble for simplicity will get us far ahead

To be humorous for laughter keeps us going

To be educated for there is no excuse for ignorance

To be talented in all that I strive to do and excel

To be foresighted and not just live for the moment

To be compassionate for we were not born in this world alone

And finally to love my fellow man as he loves me

 

For that is all I strive to be

What more do I owe the world

Reviews

[Angel Bird]

Just be completely honest and true to yourself ,and you'll achieve the full perfection life demands of you...

I enjoyed reading this, and it gave me some food for thought! Thanks.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

i enjoyed reading this piece very much - fantastic

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

The message behind this poem is generally very good, despite the near impossibility of being a perfect person. To have a decent length of a list in striving for this goal is a good start, regardless. However, as for the structure, it seemed too much like a list, and the repitition is too repititious.

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[TL Boehm]

well stated poetry. Each line a stand alone but well suited to be with the group. Nicely done.

[Rose Kelly]

Feels like the poem needs to be spaced and separated by a little more because the "to be"s get a little long.

[Erotic Goddess]

This is a wonderful declaration and a great piece that speaks volumes about what you are trying to say, who you are trying to be, the person that you want the world to know... I am really, really glad that I got to read this piece. I enjoyed it a lot.

xxoxx

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hmm.. a wonderful write... i like the ideas.. but somehow a little connection could make the piece better... the second part kind of drags at places..and kinda loses interest at places... but the work and the thoughts are wonderful... and makes up a nice read...

take care and please keep smiling... :)
niki..:)

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A wonderful write. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Shellie]

Love it. Definitily a fave. No criticism anyway bcause there's none.
This line was my fave...so simple but so true!!

To be compassionate for we were not born in this world alone

I like the way you listed everything and put nxt to it...what wud u say like an anecdote think thats the wrong word but the way you did it out...to be compassionate....for we not born into this world alone.... like that rather than...i strive to be compassionate.
Its alot of things to strive to be...but there the simple and most rewarding. thats what i like...you dont strive to be 'super succssful so you can have your house shown on cribs....you choose to be humble for simplicity will get you far ahead. Great poem!!

[Noah]

I like this. Its put together nicely and shows ones own battle with perfection, all the while showing that you don't owe the world perfection, just the best u can be. Great write.