Same But Different

Thoughts&Feelings I'd felt when I had trouble getting over a relationship

It all seems the same but its somehow so different inside.

It’s all in disarray and I just have to say.

 

I guess that if I died, nothing would change,

Everything for you girl would still be the same.

I'm just a memory, not to be forgotten, not to be regretted,

Not the one in your heart, just a lost game

 

I may be over you before,

But I'm still right here, where I drowned.

Choking in misery, going through memories,

Screaming, my lungs sore.

 

Trickles weld up in my eyes,

As I imagine you here by my side.

What would I not sacrifice?

For that key to your heart that died.

 

It all seems the same but its somehow so different inside.

With my eyes wide, I scream silently in vain

 

I faintly remember you against my skin.

It was drizzling, it was,

As you stared deep and melted into me.

 

I know you felt like dying,

Lying on the cold gravel crying,

Till your eyes ran dry,

That you decided to end this

With a relieved sigh

 

After we parted, I changed.

Became conserved I did,

Just longing for your shadows to pass by me

Without a lie behind my creed

 

Reviews

[Mason]

very good poem my friend. what anguish! I can only imagine

[iamcarolfierce]

Maybe, the saddest fact for me is knowing that the one you love doesn't give a damn care no matter how badly hurt you are. This is an excellent job. Upon reading this, I suddenly remembered someone from the past. Someone whom I loved yet doesn't love me back. I buried him under my thoughts yet until now, I am still under him. I guess I'm still in love with him. And the feeling still sucks 'cause I don't even know if he still knows me. Anyway, great writing. :)

[SpokenWord]

This is really good with emotion, great words that flow and a story of lost love. It reminds me of my first hear break, my first lesson that lost love could manifest into physical pain and not just mental or heart felt. How it changes our lives and how we view love, "friend or foe". I really like how you describe being stuck in that same place as they broke your heart, moving on but memories pulling you back not able to fully let go.

[PaperHearts]

What powerful emotions! There was a real sense of honesty and vulnerability in this piece that I liked, and I thought that the way you worded your poem was so truthful, which made it a really relatable poem. I liked the intensity within this piece, and the imagery that you created through that intensity. I had a bit of an issue with the flow of the piece, as I found it a little inconsistent at times, but other than that, this was great! :) Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[mmzx]

this is another great piece. damn you're good.
i feel your emotions and your jumbled up feelings.
awesomeeee.