Beautiful Lie

Something I wrote when my feelings were all in a mess

Childish thoughts, fake smiles with arms wide,
Only the rain knew i cried.
Down was my heart, what was i to do,
with the rest of my life.
You lied, you lied.
You fucked the light of my life.

Deceived you did, bury me.
You loved it, you loved me.
Though so beautiful, was i sober,
you tore my heart asunder.
You lied, you lied.

Gullible I was, got me in a state of remorse,
from the lust from your lips,
the shiver from your hips,
never did you catch me not smiling.
What were you thinking, you said we were one.
Never were we the fallen.

The love we had was so sweet,

even if it tore my heart wide,
I admit.
Just strode across the room you did,
all the lies that you hid,
just succumbed to the next prince in need.

Deceived you did, bury me.
You loved it, you loved me.
Though so beautiful, was i sober,
you tore my heart asunder.
You lied, you lied.

Childish thoughts, fake smiles with arms wide,
nobody knew I was the one that lied.

Reviews

[iamcarolfierce]

This is very emotional, very beautiful. I LIKE IT. I remembered all the lies that I had from someone, and how I lied to them as well. :)

[PaperHearts]

Wow! Nice! I really liked this. It was powerful, emotional, and definitely made an impact. I loved the amount of honesty in this piece, and the raw way in which the emotions were expressed. I thought that the wording was perfect for the tone of the poem, particularly with the phrase 'You Lied'. An interesting twist at the end too. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[MuSe Ampoule]

interesting paradigm...leading us to believe she lied while at the end you write you lied...was the truth that you lied to yourself or your body lied to you in thinking you loved her? Makes one think! Very good piece.

[SpokenWord]

If I read the last line correctly it was you who lied and blamed her for it? If so than what a master lie teller you are, for that is a hard thing to accomplish without no one knowing. This was a great poem to me, enjoyed it, "You lied, you lied" LOL

[Hush Hush]

wow, seriously you got some cool talent here, although it does sound like lyrics maybe you should make it longer or something :) well done

[mmzx]

OMG ismail. this is good!
I like this. ->>>
Deceived you did, bury me.
You loved it, you loved me.
Though so beautiful, was I sober,
you tore my heart asunder.
You lied, you lied.

Hahahaha anyway, hello new friend :D