Hate

So this was an assignment for english last year where we had to write about an emotion or weather. I figured people would do nice things like "happiness" so I chose hate to be different.

Hate

 

Hate is a raging inferno in your soul,

waiting to be unleashed,

so it can demolish everything in its path.

 

Hate hurts like a wasp sting,

and though the stinger is gone,

there still remains a scar,

but this one is left on the heart.

 

It lies in wait like an animal waiting to attack, ready to release its fury at any minute.

 

Hate is like a cinnamon candy.

It begins out subtle,

but grows stronger with time.

 

Hate is a friendship that will never happen,

or one long forgotten.

 

Hate is as black as the midnight sky,

and just as cold and empty.

 

For all the terrible things hate causes,

it is almost unforgivable.

Almost.  

Author's Note

So... please tell me what you think! I wrote this last year (6th grade) so I haven't really thougnt about it until now when I figured I'd post some stuff on here :)

Reviews

[PJ Stevens]

The message stands out clearly. Well done. The lack of rhyme only reinforces the feeling, the meaning of hatred: to the point. It might not be about a person, but it personifies hate in a way that draws a reader in. Excellent job.

[Rian Field]

I love the descriptions, it's putting it in terms I never couldve imagined it as. I especially like the opening line.

[Arien Bleuefire]

this ones my fav!!!! it even sounds like me just less happy!!! ;)

[Alex Thomas]

Whoa. Powerfully descriptive and completely true in every aspect mentioned. It's almost frightening the way you put it!