My Better Half

not actually a poem, rather a song. its a song about my best friend

Verse 1: E B Cm# A

You've got a better heart

You always know what to say

You have gotta lotta class

Cuz it’s the southern way

You’ve never said, said a mean thing

At least not that I recall

If I’m gonna sum it up

I would say you’re on top of it all

Chorus: E Cm# A B

I don’t know if it’s something you can see

But you really made an impact on me

You can make me smile you can make me laugh

You’re my better half

Verse 2: E B Cm# A

Shes that good example

The kind my mama refers to

She goes above and beyond

While I ran she flew

Her hugs are strong, but her faith is stronger

And she’s so humble, that she

Probably doesn’t think this song’s about her

*Chorus E Cm# A B

Bridge: Cm# A B

I’m a handful, I’m a mess, I’m a half and you’re the rest

I shouldn’t be up to your standards

We always pick up where we left off

Like you were never gone

And Caroline in my eyes

You can do no wrong

*Chorus E Cm# A B

Author's Note

let me know what you think could be improved and please give you suggestions

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

This does make a fine poem. Although I don't know anything about songwriting, and I'm not too swift on singer Taylor, it does sound like it would make a nice song also. Do you play an instrument? You seem familiar with chords, chorus and bridge, as well as stanzas and rhythm. The only thing I might suggest (and it really is a small thing) is changing the word 'transcendence' in the last verse. I'm not sure that fits with the rest of the character description. No big deal. Overall, it's well done.

[rachael]

thank you so much. most constructive review ive gotten. and yes i do play and instrument, 2 actually. this song was written for guitar or paino. alsoi know what you mean about transcendence. its just one of those places where i just cant seem to find the right word. any suggestions? its still a work in progress but its mostly done. once again thanks so much

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

A good song composed. I like the following lines:
We always pick up where we left off

Like you were never gone

And Caroline in my eyes

You can do no wrong

[Fréyjä Helv..]

A good read indeed. I enjoyed it as well. It sounded good... nice work...

[rachael]

thanks!

[pumpkin head]

I enjoy this read, like the chords you give to play it.
Awesome

[rachael]

thank you so much for the feedback! im currently working on improving some of the lyrics. any suggestions?