Saving Me

A smile that lights the darkened streets

Eyes that pour into mine

I didn’t know where I was, until you arrived

You slowly started to enlighten my life

Where would I be, if we didn’t met

Somewhere dark sad and gloomy

Thank god you were there to save me

From the monster of self-destruction

That tried to consume me

You brought me out from my fog

And forever I am greatful

You saved me from the dark

Showed me the light

You have left a permeate mark

That will forever warm me inside

Author's Note

sorry the rythem is alittle off.

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I think the worst thing you could have done to this poem is create a perfectly symmetrical structure. The candid nature of your words give nothing but sincerity. IMO...such perfection is by design and is very hard to be convincing as coming from the heart. On the extreme end...some poets can take a poem with lines that seem totally random in length and sing them with musical compositions to make amazing songs. I've played with a few.

but, enough with structure. This was a real gem.....with a romantic side that comes from the days of old we daydream of.

[nevermindfan1991]

Nice poem, very well written and the rhythm seems perfect to me!

[~ Stefanie ~]

This was really good! I don't think the rythem was off at all. It was perfect just the way you wrote it :)

[Ubiquitous]

I can completely relate. Very well written, I can see your emotions flowing. Which is often something we need desperately. I'm glad you found someone that makes you happy! Well written!

[Forgotten]

:P

[Leave me alone....]

omg this is incredible! love it :)

[bobby]

I liked the honesty and the confessions you gave away freely, trusting the one whom you wrote this for to receive all of you just the way you are.

[BeautyFromPain]

OMG. This is incrediblee.

[WritersSoul]

great write, i like how you described your own little hell and how whoever he/she is saved you :)
Great write :)
Beth :3

[Nihilum]

I like it :)
Going into my favourites

[Pi Cee]

A few errors, I'd advise you to look over your grammar here a bit. But other than that, this is a great concept to write on. Good job.