Forged Metal Dream Roll

ALL THAT WE SEE OR SEEM IS BUT A DREAM WITHIN A DREAM (Quote) a poem in 6/8 cascade and then freeform. and then I came back and rewrote it ! and then rewrote it from scratch !

All that

 

Is written words falling

 

sculpted to the page thoughts recalled

 

such little time

 

To break the gentle blue passion

 

Twilight ridden begotten starred

 

In night

 

We seem

 

 apart and together

 

stroking your hair crestfallen  

 

in moonlight

 

Sliding from shoulder to backbone

 

Across many journeys I've taken

 

To heart

 

Is but

 

The hour sounding

 

The drum roll of early hours

 

Ring on ring

 

Echoing the motion emotion forged

 

Deep between sheets silent chords

 

Harp played

 

a dream

 

Just a breath away

 

Echoing softly in unison

 

Twisted metal

 

Molded back in the flame desire

 

Where muscle and mind require

 

Delight

 

within

 

This shade feathered nest

 

arms stretch and redress the days pain

 

Be reborn

 

Into all we knew and wanted

 

Refuge from the storms of blue

 

Frozen

 

a dream

 

In untempered time

 

both yours and mine twisted bound

 

complete whole

 

United song echoing bright

 

Scattering ghosts to fly south

 

Broken

Author's Note

version 3 (nothing like version 2)

Reviews

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations for winning the Keeping-the-Dream-Alive Contest!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem

[emmajoy]

Wonderful writing, exemplary format and beautiful words .. just what real poetry should be.

'Deep between sheets silent chords' - a silky phrase, few words, big meaning

Thank you very much for sharing

[Helen Crutchett]

Oh this was truly a joy to read. Great poetry indeed!
You have submitted one awesome write to my contest.
Thank you for "Keeping the Dream alive! ~ Helena

[Requs]

i loved it. just lots of scrolling O.o the imagery reached me, i guess i could say. I like the image of "scattering ghosts flying south, broken"