Rain

a little poem i have for a story... possibly

feeling the rain upon my skin
amazingly beautiful till the end
like piercing needles through my soul
this insane emotion i can no longer control
that's what i feel when I'm with you
the most indescribable ride i've been through

i want rain through my fingertips
during the gardenia lunar eclipse
invisioning you just standing there
while crystals drop into your hair
winter rain, a chilling sensation
our own little private celebration

thunder rolling in the sky
lightning flashing in my eyes
rain it falls silently
upon our skins, just you and me
the same feeling, so indescribable
amazing, fantastic, never ending spells of love

standing in the rain
you wash away my pain
as long as i can experience it with you
there's nothing i would rather do

feeling the rain upon my skin
amazingly beautiful till the end

Reviews

[Maylea]

That was really good. Excellent job on imagery. I could picture everything very well. It flowed well, only I would advise to try a little less rhyming, sometimes it flows more smoothly. But all in all I liked this one!