"Orange" - scrap

"Orange" - scrap

A Story by Ravel Lopez
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Something I came up with after walking home late at night. Could make something of it later, not sure yet. Style, inspired by Chuck Hogan.

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    Dark, cold and orange.
    These were never explicitly thought, but understood. Basic and essential. Understood to Hank, as home.
    Hank sat on his bench. During the day, it belonged to the city, for people waiting for the bus. But at night, it was Hank’s. The man spent what change he was able to beg for on a small plastic bottle. As he drank, he spilled half of it on his faded, decades old, army fatigues. Whether the uniform was his originally or someone else’s, he couldn’t remember, nor did he care to. He wasn’t even sure if he was a vet, let alone in the Vietnam War, like he told people. He wasn’t sure of much anymore. Just that this was his bench, on the corner of his street, in his dark, cold, orange home.

    He was dozing off, leaning more and more into his plastic bag, holding his clothes and doubling as a pillow. Cigarette smoke and the sound of people startled him awake. He barely saw the group of people pass in front of him when he started to speak. Half in a drunk stupor, half reflexive, he mumbled loudly at their backs.

    “scoosme! Doohaf change?”
    They ignored him, or didn’t hear him, already crossing the street, leaving him standing uneasily, still trying to work his mouth to get their attention. He stopped after awhile. He sat back down and closed his eyes. A nearby neon light buzzed and whined, a few cars drove by. He opened his eyes, sensing a presence.

    Sure enough, a young man approached. The man was dressed in black: black jeans, a black leather jacket over a black hooded sweater, hood covering his head. But Hank noticed none of this. Again out of reflex, Hank asked, “Canyouhelpme?”


    The young man, not dismissive in anyway, replied dryly yet almost compassionately and without pity, “I can help you.”
    “I need change for a cigarette.” Hank’s words were practically forced out of him, slurred and wheezy. His gaze never focused on the man, but rather just behind him, to his right.
    “I can give you a cigarette.”  He seemed intent on helping this drunk old man. With cold calm; a sense of professionalism. The man stood distinguished, yet unassuming. He looked Hank dead in the eye. He pulled out a pack from his pocket and popped one out. Hank took it and the man even lit it for him. He did not take one for himself.

    Almost without interest and, again, with dry compassion, the man asked, “What’s your name?”

    “Mynamesshank” he said, slurring every syllable. “whatsyurrs?”
    The young man did not reply.

    Hank, feeling the nicotine’s effect, noticed the young man’s face, the look in his eyes. In a rare moment of clarity, Hank asked “Whado you want? whatdoyou doin hur?” Fear unintentionally seeped into the last question. The man took his time to answer.

    “What I want doesn’t matter...” at this point the man stood up and Hank noticed his height for the first time. “I was sent here to kill you.”
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© 2012 Ravel Lopez


Author's Note

Ravel Lopez
Please ignore the terrible indents and paragraphing. I would much rather a better editor, but this is what I got.

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Added on April 19, 2012
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Ravel Lopez
Ravel Lopez

Albuquerque, NM



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A nerdy fellow from Duke City, NM. Originally from NE. Graphic Designer by day, moonlights as a fiction writer. I've never thought myself as a good writer, or creative for that matter, but the stories.. more..

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