A Watcher From Space

I cried

and my tears dropped

from the night sky

and fell upon

a crying planet

 

It cried

and its miserable moans echoed

through the cosmos

and it had

a fairly good reason to

 

The inhabitants cried

and since they had no hope

there goals and dreams did not exist

and they vanished

from the face of the earth

 

I only wish I could have done more

But they never called for me

Reviews

[Touché Armada]

I like this, kind of abstract. Reminds me of something I have been playing with along simmilar lines.. The Kuiper belt and tears smashing into dark matter, frozen in the out reachers of darkness, slow motion tumbling.. Well perhaps something for All Hallow's Eve, dont know yet. The diferent levels of space is kind of good in this piece.. Though I'm not sure this is working as good as it could

The inhabitants cried

(and) since they had no hope

there goals(,) (and) dreams did not exist

and they vanished

from the face of the earth


I really am the most hopeless editor ever, so if it doesnt work for you (because its yours) just leave it.
Anyhow, good work.

[Kiya]

Powerful... People who don't believe in something greater than themselves are lost to the world. We all need someone to blame, love and worship, and so God came to us. A wonderful poem, Chas. :)