Winter Walk

Two people take a walk in the snow

WINTER WALK

RASMUS SCHAAL LINNEBERG

 

”It’s a beautiful night.”

She didn’t reply, and she didn’t have to. She only rubbed her hands together and breathed into them, the vapourising air ascending in a slow dancing manner from her fingers into the crisp cold evenening.

”The thing about this kind of cold,” I went on, ”is that we breathe out and we get this kind of facade between ourselves and the world. For just a second, we get to remember what is was like to be a kid and pretend to smoke cigarettes. For just a second, it’s like that little cloud of our own breath can blur out all despair in the world.”

This time she looked at me. Whether it was her eyes or her look that pierced my cloud, I don’t know. All I know is that whatever did, was about to hit me, and hit me hard.

”Blurring it out, not resolving it,” she said. She had obviously misunderstood my original intent, and while I was trying to figure out how to make amends for my unclear statement, it struck me just how white the snow was and how poisonous it was for me to be walking around, making muddy footprints.

”Alas, if I had to care for the whole world, I would eventually crumble.”

Once again she was quiet. 

THE END

Author's Note

Ignore the grammar problems, english is not my native tongue.

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

Wow, this is very good. A complete, poignant story told in only a few lines, it is quite remarkable actually, and I enjoyed it greatly. "little cloud of our own breath", yes, that is where all that we are can be found: dreams, hope, escape... Well done!

[Melon Race]

Thank you so much. This means a lot to me, especially coming from a writer whose poems I take so much joy in reading.

[sithlordjp]

you are quite welcome. Looking forward to read more of your work. I am here to learn and get inspiration from other writers.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Again...a sucker for the voice of the main character! If only people were that introspective in real life...wow. Well done!

[quinfinn]

very nicely done and written quite well. hard to believe that English is not your native tongue. impressive!

[Melon Race]

thank you! so nice of you to read it

[Zap-the-awesome]

Hm. I like it. Excellent work.

[Melon Race]

Thank you very much

[char]

"If I had to care for the whole world, I would eventually crumble." That line is cool. Even though English isn't your mother tongue, this was pretty damn good. Good job! :)

[Melon Race]

Thank you so much, I really appreciate it.

[char]

You're welcome!!