Come home,Love!

But,where is my home?

Oh, love,my love.
Where you dwell, but in my heart.
You go away in the morning.
At home, when darkness comes.

Just go, do your routine activities.
Enjoy yourself ,but be safe.
Forget me not, I don�t say
Be at home is all right!

Reviews

[Mickey Ellison]

I'm sorry, Karen, perhaps its me, but there are several disconnects in this. It lacks rythm or cadence of any kind. I don't necessarily think it should rhyme, but the thoughts should flow. It's difficult to read and the thought patterns are not at all continuous. If the disconsonance is what you were trying for, then congratulations. I'm just too old, I guess to appreciate it.

[Edward Clay]

there's a really romantic taste in the first stanza. the words flow like velvet and evoke that sense.

the second stanza differes considerably, and feels distant from that first feel. but it represents a longing. which im guessing is the subject matter of this.

[Jenny Davis]

The sentiments in this piece are lovely and relatable...they say distance makes the heart grow fonder, but sometimes I don't think so! Very nicely written :)

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Karen-

Great poem. Love is such a beautiful topic about which to write. It is so difficult to be apart from the one that you love.

Great write!

-Gabe

[Wolfwind Words]

Truly felt in the heart. How many times does one half stay behind, while the other half leaves. Even if it is for just a little while. I can relate to the torment. For i have been on both sides.
Thanks for sharing!

[Nana Carmine]

Wow. That's beautiful. But where is home is a good question. I really like the flow and the imagery. Thanks for sharing it with us. It's beautiful.

~Nana Carmine

[E. M. Murren]

This is a lovely piece. well stated and very sweet.

[forfila]

A lovely little love note,
to be much admired.

"Forget me not"
I am sure the recepitent would not.

Beautiful.

Love,
Me

[Reuben Porter]

A short, but very nice poem. May I suggest adding to this one at a later date? It has the potential to be a great piece of work.