Parking Lot Fantasy

Spontaneous

I saw you in the parking lot where I work	1
and I walked off from my job to follow you,	2
beautiful child of God with dark hair and even darker eyes.	3
I would follow you anywhere but I need to stop for gas. I'm on empty and no time   left.	4
I would follow you all the way home to where your family lives, and where your uniquely complex life is, the life that somehow goes on without me.	5
We would walk right in holding hands and have dinner with your mom and dad and we would all smile and tell anecdotes and laugh.	6
We would grow and change,	7
one hand in the other,	8
You and I could love one another	9
Oh, Stranger that I want so badly to know.	10
But she drove off.	11
So I blew her a kiss, and watched her as she went, curiosity beaming and butterflies in my heart, sick, hungry, desirous of anyone at that moment.

Author's Note

what could I do to make this pop?

Reviews

[Neo]

I love the numbers on the sides that suggest 11 seconds worth of thoughts before she drives off. Great write. :)