Hmm... The first stanza expresses fear. The second expresses insecurity. The third... well, I don't know... Fear and insecurity go hand in hand, as do these stanzas. Excellent work. I fear windows, mirrors, and eyes. So, the same, I suppose... Interesting... This is well expressed. Good job. :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
The third bit was sort of ham handed on. I was thinking about windows a lot and remembered that old .. read moreThe third bit was sort of ham handed on. I was thinking about windows a lot and remembered that old cliche at the eyes are the window to the soul. I figured I would add that in because I have a very hard time looking people in the eyes when I talk to them.
Hmm... The first stanza expresses fear. The second expresses insecurity. The third... well, I don't know... Fear and insecurity go hand in hand, as do these stanzas. Excellent work. I fear windows, mirrors, and eyes. So, the same, I suppose... Interesting... This is well expressed. Good job. :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
The third bit was sort of ham handed on. I was thinking about windows a lot and remembered that old .. read moreThe third bit was sort of ham handed on. I was thinking about windows a lot and remembered that old cliche at the eyes are the window to the soul. I figured I would add that in because I have a very hard time looking people in the eyes when I talk to them.
Awww, this is a really interesting poem. Lovely write. I like your use of fear. Hmmm.. for me, lol.. it's mirrors. lol.
But Fascinating write here. It has that slight discomfort feel to it as well as anxiety. Great job! =)
I don't really consider myself a writer, but I really wish I were.
I enjoy short, to the point poems over long, drawn out ones and stories.
I'm a sucker for rhymes. more..