The Deep End of the Pool (It's Shark Week)

This is something I wrote a month or more ago that I posted on deviantArt.

As much as I've wanted to create something meaningful with my words, I've always been hesitant of trying.
The thought of writing something expressive fills me with as much dread as the deep end of the pool.
It feels like as soon as my feet leave the shallow end, I'll be seized by the sharks and swallowed alive.

Reviews

[zainul]

I feel bad that fear overpowered you on some occasions.
But you have overcome it successfully.
Now you are fearless.
Once you tread into any place which is thought to be dangerous,the fear is sure to vanish.
Fear will fear you!
You are winning over fears.
You have presented an excellent write based on fear.
Thanks to fear.
Sometimes fear matters!

[Rallaa]

Thanks, Zain, but I still haven't gotten over my fear of sharks and deep water. Haha

[zainul]

You are welcome,Ralla.
Tell me how many persons were attacked in the pools in the last one year.
If you surely know that any pool is abound with sharks,you don't get into this.Actually,they don't know you or anybody else.They behave equally to you or your enemy.They simply attack edible thing when they are hungry.
Why take risk when there is alternatives!
Hope you will live a great life.

[Corset]

Gotta watch out for those eight ball pool sharks, lol, (i'm sorry I just HAD to :)

[sreedevi]

I AM NEW .SO I DONT KNOW WHETHER MY OPINION HOLDS GOOD OR NOT. IF YOU REPLACED "It feels like as soon as" WITH WHEN AND "I'll be" WITH I WAS IT WILL BE MORE RHYTHMIC I THINK. SHORT DECRIPTION LINGERS IN MIND MORE I MEANT.

[Rallaa]

Thank you for the criticism. You're right, that last line is somewhat awkward and I really should avoid using "like" and "as."
I'll work on changing it.
Just curious, why are you typing in caps?

[sreedevi]

i think caps is better to notice with some +ve effect. thanks for the way you had approached my opinion.

[Admiral Kirk]

It is troublesome when fear of rejection and failure keeps one from following their dreams... And this poem expresses that. I think I'm squished somewhere at the bottom of the deep end, so if you ever need to go up for air, feel free to stand on my head.

[Rallaa]

Less to do with fear of rejection and failure. This was about how I almost quite literally got sick from trying to write. Whenever I would try to write, I felt this sickness in my stomach and I wouldn't finish whatever I was writing.

[Admiral Kirk]

Yes, I used to feel like that... Comes from fear.

[Sami Khalil]

I like shark week...Lol

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

It is always a challenge to do what we really want to do. What if we fail? What if the dream dies? What if....the sharks eat me! You have a great style. Keep posting.

[Rallaa]

Thank you. I wrote this around a time I was discussing phobias with a friend. I have an intense fear of deep water due to an intense fear of sharks. I feel as if my feet aren't touching the bottom of a body of water, that something could grab me and drag me under. I'm also afraid of windows. perhaps that will be my next subject.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Well, I have a fear of bridges. I can relate. The fact that you use your fear of the deep end to illustrate your fear of writing something expressive is understandable. Fears seem so much larger than the actual act we are afraid of. Just my take. Post more!