O mine beloved mother!

An eulogy for my teacher who is my mother!

O mine beloved mother! thee canst not ever wend far,

Far to the remotest lodging from my heart,

But if 't be true thee doth, my heart's door is ajar,

Peeping thy sweet memories, gratitude for thy part.

Thou hast loved, cared and adored me,

In the picture of the children, thou hast begotten.

So tender is thy love, so deep I see

In the mouth of doom, which canst not be forgotten.

I joyously sing the praise of thy generous conduct

No such mortal on this earth hast I ever hath met

Angels tooketh era to buildeth such a kind product

Sending thee amongst mortals made their eyes wet.

Thou art the guiding god-mother I believeth,

Day by day, thou brightens my darkened path.

Day by day, my all the sorrows taketh

Thy mellow-mouthed words for a replenish bath.

Eternal beauty liveth in thy eyes,

Ne'er ending affection flows from them.

And thou art my loveliest prize

And I am thy most precious gem.

******

I pray I pray to the ultimate master of all,

To place his divine hand on that lady soul.

I beseech the creator of great and small,

To strengthen that lady to fulfil her role.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I admire you for tackling a long poem using intricate form for rhyme & dialect. Your poem is well-crafted with an "old time" sound . . . something popular to imitate . . . and difficult to get right. I must say that your Shakespearean sound is not always easy to follow & glide across while reading (a little clunky). But we don't get good at new styles if we don't try & this is a great effort for you. I have a bias against elevated language that you use here (your message is strong & well-developed, it's just the sound I don't like much) . . . this stilted language doesn't convey the warmth & affection like writing in a more conversational way (just my opinion!) (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

What a beautiful poem you've written.
It tells how amazing mothers are and that they deserve everything good.
Your thoughts and idea with the composition this piece are powerful.


Good one, Raj.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much!

[DAH]

A lovely tribute to a lovely being.

Bravo,
DAH

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[DAH]

My pleasure!

[Chris Shaw]

Written in old English, this tribute to your teacher and mother moves with graceful, cadence through its lines. It is clear to the reader just how cherished this lady is. I enjoyed both your poem and the posted images. Motherhood, a wonderful thing.

Chris

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[Erudite]

Very impressive! It couldn't have been easy writing this in old English, but you pulled it off :)

My favorite part was: "Angels tooketh era to buildeth such a kind product
Sending thee amongst mortals made their eyes wet."

Your use of the word era there really made the whole poem

5/5 would read again haha

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot!

[wordman]

very creative write,loved the layout,loved the theme

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[wordman]

you`re welcome