Mine of Noble Acts

For a person who is always ready to serve others.

Bring your love and care

To those, whole-heartedly, searching for them.

It would be a boon, 

to receive your love so soon,

as they were despondent in their despair,

seeking a lovely, lovely heart,

which is your splendid part.

They seek the scent of the flowers,

Poor, poor they! unaware of the greatest mine,

of endless affection and fragrance

that would never run out

but would eternally brightly shine,

leaving a lasting strong remembrance

to everyone- a gentleman or lout.

To live for others is an elegant thought,

To lend your noble hand to the impoverished,

To share your meal with a destitute boy,

To give your love to a crooked lady.

All these rich beauties gathered by whom?

Whose name would witness the day of doom?

Such noble natures can behold a few,

But I find one in you.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your poem addresses a topic that is not very common here in the USA. I have been a person who loves to volunteer all my life & I think others should do it if they are able. It is a way to GET as much as you GIVE. The best part of your poem are lines 2,3,4 of the last verse . . . becuz here you are getting more into the specifics. Your writing is grand, but it can tend to be general. Messages always come alive when you get down to the detailed level as you start to do in the lines I mentioned. All in all, good work to be honoring those who give of themselves (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot!

[costa siwale]

Quite refreshing, steady flow and lovely words my friend.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[Tiffany K Charles]

it reminds me of a caregiver looking for someone to care for or an animal looking for someone to love. A great way to show range and emotion.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[PaintedBirdy]

this is wonderful. it reminds me of a wise man i once met on my travels. he said "give recklessly, and when you find yourself in reckless places then you should continue giving because there is where the most giving is needed. go to that place recklessly, because only recklessly is true love, like God."

anyway, thank you for this sharing!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[The Iron Horseman]

This is a beautiful sentiment, Raj, and the person you depict must be a very special person, but the poem itself lacks punch. It needs some hard facts to give it life, some specifics to hold one's attention. I regret to say that although I appreciated the good intent, I was bored by the time I reached the end of the poem. Sorry, my friend.

[Raj Sahu]

I'll take care next time. Thank you.

[annalysiar]

Beautifully done. Nicely formatted and crafted. I appreciate this, thank you for letting me read it...

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[BlackPrince]

This is a wonderful, compassionate poem.
'Bring your love and care to those wholeheartedly searching for them'!

When it seems at times even close loved ones can take our love for granted, indeed, there are many people out there that would benefit emotionally from our smiles and friendly nature. Somebody is waiting for our helping hand.

Well done!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, this is poetry written in a classical style, this has a nice 19th Century feeling..you should be pleased with this, well done.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much.

[JayG]

When writing structured poetry (rhyming) there's a LOT more to it than dropping in a rhyming pair of lines now and then. The flow of words within the line should act to maintain a cadence in the same way the words of a song must. Stanza to stanza there must be the continuity that helps the reader perform as you intend it to be heard, rather than simply read the words. The tricks of craft aren't obvious to the reader, but much of it, once pointed out, will make you say, "Why didn't I see that?" So it's well worth a bit of time invested in your poet's education.

For a good example of how the flow of words can literally have you tapping your feet to the drumbeat the words create, look at, The Cremation of Sam McGee, by Robert Service (link below). He wrote it over 100 years ago, and it still has the power to entertain, and bring a smile.

After you read it, look at the analysis in the following pages. It's well worth the time.
https://www.shmoop.com/cremation-sam-mcgee/poem-text.html

And for a good grounding in the basics of structured poetry, and how the flow of words can be made to involve the reader, read the excerpt to Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled, on Amazon.

Hang in thee, and keep on writing.

Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/

[Onlyme]

Aw, what a beautiful, sweet, sincere, pure poem of open-heartedness and love for others and not expecting anything back. But just the pleasure and enjoyment of helping others. Giving with a pure heart and love.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!