A Birthday Soliloquy

The poet talks about his lover on the occasion of the latter's birthday in this loving soliloquy.

It's again a joyous day, October Thirty-First;

You descended eighteen summers ago on this Earth,

To bless its feet with your feet,

To quench the prolong thirst

Of Someone, whose life is full of the dearth

Of love and merriness, which would meet

Surely to the doom unless your birth

safeguarded it. That 'Someone' would burst

With delight and love if your love's heat

Will ignite his heart and make it a peat,

Which would burn for the sake of the worst,

Who keeps a little or no worth.

I confess before you that I am 'Mr. Someone'

And would drink hemlock if it tasted like you

And crown you the 'Conqueror' of my heart

And beg you not to depart

From my melancholy life as after 'Who'

Would be my life other than you? None!

You are the beauty of a delightful day,

But also the pain of a forlorn night.

Listen what the verses of Kierkegaard say:

"Life can only be understood backwards;

But it must be lived forwards"

And me, following this with all my might.

I create new memories to drop the old ones,

But you still find room in every new memory.

The clear stream of thought that runs

Make me sleep in the deepest reverie

And I imagine there that a human heart-

Cost in millions- I gave it to you for free.

So never, never and ever; O! You depart

But pour your love to bloom this withered tree.

O, what sufferings have I to bear

In inferno for not accepting you my paradise?

I don't keep this thought so near,

As this mere poet is not so wise! 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

To answer your question in authors notes -- your poem does not seem to have a regular pattern of rhyming, but your rhyming lines work well & are often enuf to feel the rhyming rhythm. I do not get the feeling that this poem has anything to do with someone's birthday. But that just means it's not a very well-chosen title. The poem itself is well done & interesting & creative. May I suggest: "Ode to My Lover" which reflects your message. The word "dearth" (scarcity) seems like a bad choice. But otherwise, you have written this with many interesting & poetic word choices. Good job of playing with font colors & using artwork to illustrate the feelings in your words (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Raj Sahu]

Yes, I agree that there is an irregular rhyme scheme. For birthday it signifies that the poet want his lover to give him a return gift in disguise of loving him forever. He's revealing all these sentiments in the above work. For the title, as you suggests, it is due to some social limitations to not keep that actual title which you offer but some vague and incoherent one. Thank you so much for your lovely review!

[barleygirl]

Thank you for explaining. I understand now! *smile* Have a love-filled holiday season!

[A Soap Mess Stories]

An interesting read. Well done.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[Isimbabi]

Like your other pieces this is really nice.
"Life can only be understood backwards, but must be lived forwards" one of my best quotes and you used it perfectly.
It's lightly quaint and absorbing. It's an interesting read.

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot dear!

[Leslie Philibert]

This is a charming write, full of fun and good emotions. Well done Raj ...

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[emptyinkwell]

Excellent ballad! The person to whom you are writing should be delighted to read this!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[costa siwale]

A wonderful Ballad (am I right).
I Love the feeling of fantasy in this one, teasing at one's imagination, its like been whisk away.

well done

[Raj Sahu]

Yes, a kind of! Thank you.

[Skye Emily]

good job i love it i hope you make more that are even better

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[Sneh]

Very lovely expression of feelings carrying smooth flow and a sweetest gift ..!
Keep writing :)

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[John the Baptist]

A well rhymed poem with an interesting quote from Kierkegaard.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[Weeping willow]

Beautifully expressed and flows nicely ;-}

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you dear!

[Najam Us Saher]

What an impressive work. Loved the unique way of birthday greetings.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.