Ode to Both My Mothers

A devoted work to my beloved mother and my teacher to whom I considered no less than a mother.

My mind muddl'd among various things, 

But ne'er had I sunk into oblivion. 

Thy puissant presence stand firm among beings 

Thou art this passing world's champion. 

What laud shall I offer to thee, 

For thy toils, worries, and emotions? 

And lo! the haggard visage of my goddess, 

I wonder, if any creature on land or sea, 

Can ever and ever grok my notions? 

I aver that thy love is eternally ageless.

 

Thy shadow o'er me is the apricity, 

Thine affection flows like a deluge, 

No writ can ever define the affinity, 

Of our relation tough and huge. 

How in heaven's name do I forget, 

Thy soft reprimands for my sake, 

Eftsoons why thee regret in thy sombre core, 

Even thy essence rises from the sweat, 

Corrected me on my every mistake, 

For which I bow before thee and adore.

'Tis thy glory of which everyone sings,

The melodious lyrics of song flows,

What immense joy the song brings,

Soothe my heart during my woes.

O, winsome lady! thy place so high,

Thy position surpass the heights of welkin,

Men of ground venerate thee on bent knees,

Bairns of ground find no other to rely,

Filled with, therefore, thy praise herein,

And smeared over land by each cardinal breeze.

Thou hast drilled a niche in my heart,

To make a space for thee to dwell,

Live in this abode, but ne'er depart,

Ne'er ever I can bid thee farewell.

Adieu! Adieu! I should verily stop there,

Tomes are least before thy eulogies,

As no creature is equipollent to mother,

Not in truth or in sweven, can anyone bear,

The seclusion from thee. All ideologies

says 'Here is the mother, whenas come another?'

Author's Note

Please correct my grammar here as it is my first writing in an archaic style.

Reviews

[Lara Crimson]

"Thou hast drilled a niche in my heart,
To make a space for thee to dwell,
Live in this abode, but ne'er depart,
Ne'er ever I can bid thee farewell."

As you stated, MOM is really WOW. I too remember how my mother scolds gently to me for my mistakes. It draws a sketch of my mother before me.
Now, about your work, The concept of ode i very successful here. You wrote it in the most usual style with a rhyming scheme ABABCDECDE. The archaism leaves a charming effects over the poem. Thank you for sharing such a marvellous work. Keep writing.

[Raj Sahu]

I'm glad with your review. Thanks a lot.

[Nolo Segundo]

Well, I thought I had a good vocabulary and command of the English language [not an easy beast to tame] but you 'blew my mind' with this work. Remarkable!!!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot! 😊😊

[John the Baptist]

Would make a nice Mothers Day tribute.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[Carola]

a lovely poem, i enjoyed it & i like the shakespeare-like style of writing.
your mother must be very special. (though not all mothers are great!)
but i couldn't find 'apricrity' & 'eftsoons' in the dictionary.

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot! Apricity is an obsolete term for the warmth of the Sun and Eftsoons is an archaic term for ‘Soon after’.

[Carola]

thanks for the explanation.
where did you find these archaic words ?

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Grammar is immaterial when the words convey such love and devotion. Your mothers are blessed to have you. An extraordinary tribute and great layout too.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much.

[Taniska 😊€..]

It's a really heart touching poem because Mom is really wow ,love it keep writing (smiles)😊.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[Taniska 😊😊]

Your most welcome !

[Allen Smuckler]

this is as good as it gets... wouldn't change a thing...
Loved the old English... grammar not an issue, but even if it was... no-one but a scholar would know.
Terrific write... seriously, as good as I've seen in a while...

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much.

[EcstaticEuphoria]

This is so great! Love the reference and the Shakespearianism, it's so fun to read and dabble in. Keep it up!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you again.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Thanks so much for entering my competition If you could come back a ?
I love the old fashioned wording and love the mum and wow concept and the pictures and the wording and the whole poem. Its a tribute to your teacher and your Mum. I enjoyed this immensely and your love for both are profound and deep anyone can see that. We take our mums for granted they are angels on earth and their for a purpose. You cannot be a mum half heartedly it is with whole spirit and heart. you showed this in your poem thanks again

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot.

[Raven Starhawk]

Mothers can be the most wonderful inspiration. Your words are cleverly woven and I can relate to much of what was written.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much.

[송지ፏ..]

I envy you, I only had a sexually, physically, and emotionally abusive mother. Nice poem, but was hard to understand for me.

[Raj Sahu]

Mother doing all these heinous acts? Please clarify.

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

My mother sexually abused me often and let her husband and cheating boyfriends sexully abuse me. She often beat me too.

[Raj Sahu]

Oh my goodness! Feeling sorry for you.

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thanks, although I am slowly healing