Goldie the Goldfish

Goldie the Goldfish

A Poem by Raj Sahu
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An emotional poem for my pet Goldie the Goldfish.

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You are the charm of my little bowl,
Your skin and scale so orange
Like a pleasing sunset. I extol
your charm that no one can challenge.

I am happy as a clam,
whenever I struck with your glance,
Even during my toughest exam,
Seeing you means my luck is enhanced.

I love how you eat
Like a bird feeds on seeds.
How can I forget your sweet
water bubbles which everybody heeds.

O, Goldie! You are the precious part of my kin,
"Don't ever leave me", came a voice from within.

© 2018 Raj Sahu


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Raj Sahu
You would fall in love with her on the very first sight!

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Very cute poem, and just from your description in this one I can just imagine how much joy Goldie must bring you.
"You are the charm of my little bowl,
Your skin and scale so orange
Like a pleasing sunset. I extol
your charm that no one can challenge."
That first stanza starts this one off great here, and I loved this poem. Good job!


Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

6 Years Ago

Thanks a lot!



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I thought this was sweet and endearing. It isn't often one finds such adoration attached to a goldfish.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

6 Years Ago

Thank you!
Oh! Sonnet seems to alive the pet. Nice.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

6 Years Ago

Thank you.
er..nice work...fish..er..nice pet...like it..er..

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

6 Years Ago

Thank you.
"I am happy as a clam,
whenever I struck with your glance,
Even during my toughest exam,
Seeing you means my luck is enhanced."

Being an animal lover, I can comprehend your passionate feeling for your pet. Company of pets is really jocund.
Now about your work, I like how you expresses the feeling in a form of sonnet and the golden orange colour is just appropriate with the subject. Rhymes are well enough to create a musical effect. The images are so catchy. Thank you for sharing. Looking for more of your works.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

6 Years Ago

Thanks a lot!
Good work indeed...Wrote nice for your dear goldfish...The painting is beautiful.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
"O, Goldie! You are the precious part of my kin,
"Don't ever leave me", came a voice from within."

I love this couplet in the entire sonnet. I wish that Goldie lives forever!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

6 Years Ago

Oh! Thank you so much.
This is precious. I love it

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

6 Years Ago

Thank you!
Good rhyme scheme here, you're clearly well-read and very talented. From what I've read, the tone in your poems is usually joyful and uplifting, with a quick tempo. I also like the photos you use, they add more personification to the subject. This was a very sweet little piece that brightened my morning. Thanks for sharing :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

6 Years Ago

Thanks a lot!
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Short and sweet... I love it!
Well the poem describes your goldfish very well. I really appreciate your writing skill. Keep it up!
Good Luck!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
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6 Years Ago

You're welcome
This is so cute and very well written. I could picture every thing that you described. I have also had many pets in the past that have given me the same feelings. I truly love this poem!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much.

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Added on May 5, 2018
Last Updated on May 6, 2018
Tags: Pet, Goldfish, Love, Care

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Raj Sahu
Raj Sahu

Burhanpur, Madhya Pradesh, India



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Myself Raj Sahu from the historic town of Burhanpur, Madhya Pradesh, India. I had completed my high schooling with flying colours from Choithram School, Indore in Humanities stream and was first in or.. more..

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