Pandemonium of Spiders

A factitious situation: what if my town was overrun by robot spiders.

Around twilight they turn towards us,

Smashing what comes their way- car or bus!

What a havoc they rise, O Lord!

Seems as death itself combating with a sword.

On hearing the chaos and confusion and din,

I assail without a thought of lose or win.

We have to grin and bear it, I know;

O What a cataclysm! What a blow!

With all their whopping webs they broke out,

"There are many of them!" exclaimed I, without a doubt.

I hasten slowly to strangle it with a noose

But it escaped as it become too loose.

Hitherto where the vision go,

The skyscrapers lies so low!

Here and there the gigantic wreckage lies,

Here and there some or other man dies!

And there comes another with a boisterous assault,

Slaughtering several souls seems without a fault.

"Who is here so valiant for a duel?", I bawled;

"The man who posed this question", they called.

"ME?" yelled I, lamenting on my fate,

My perpetual foe till the doom's date.

"Don't trample upon me!" quoth I, with a scream;

Blessed is my fate, it's just a horrendous dream.

***

Not just a dream, now I suppose;

"Why?" all readers may oppose,

A gossamer with a spider lays beside me,

Compelled me to break down the dream and see.

Author's Note

Weird and coward! :D

Reviews

[Andrea Greene]

This is really very interesting, considering you expanded a dream into a grand and entertaining story, with an amazing rhyming sequence and many quotable instances. My only question is why you decided to recolor certain quotes from the text, such as "who is here so valiant for a duel" and others. I would suggest keeping everything the same color, unless there's an artistic decision behind it, just for the sake of comprehension. Otherwise, this is a lovely, witty poem!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot for your wonderful review.
I recoloured them in order to highlights all the conversations.

[The Iron Horseman]

I liked the idea, Raj, but I found that the rhythm staggered around a bit. Also 'assail over' left me wondering what you actually meant. and 'hasten slowly' had me pondering just how you do that!
I do enjoy story poems. This just needs a little tidying up.

[Raj Sahu]

'Assail over' here means to attack and 'hasten slowly' adds that it is an attack from back without giving any idea to the opponent about attack.
Thank you so much!

[The Iron Horseman]

Thank you for the clarification. In that case, the 'over' is redundant, the 'assail' should stand alone. I'm afraid that I still don't understand how 'hasten slowly, equates to an attack from the rear. It is, in fact, an oxymoron.

[This Guy (Again)]

Good piece. Reminds me of the Twilight Zone and a bit of Earth Defense Force.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[J.E.B]

I think I'm scared at least for a moment. But of course that is what a gud poet does

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

I hate spiders and snakes are my utter worst 🌹

[Raj Sahu]

Me too! :D

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Lol🌹scorpions are wirse🌹

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Worse.....

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

What is to come we all need to stand prepared for- how it all ends- well have to wait and see but what will be will be- well written🌹

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Pleasure🌹

[Stephanie M]

Well written. This kind of reminds me of a Godzilla movie with spiders. Terrifying!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot!