Pandemonium of Spiders

A factitious situation: what if my town was overrun by robot spiders.

Around twilight they turn towards us,

Smashing what comes their way- car or bus!

What a havoc they rise, O Lord!

Seems as death itself combating with a sword.

On hearing the chaos and confusion and din,

I assail without a thought of lose or win.

We have to grin and bear it, I know;

O What a cataclysm! What a blow!

With all their whopping webs they broke out,

"There are many of them!" exclaimed I, without a doubt.

I hasten slowly to strangle it with a noose

But it escaped as it become too loose.

Hitherto where the vision go,

The skyscrapers lies so low!

Here and there the gigantic wreckage lies,

Here and there some or other man dies!

And there comes another with a boisterous assault,

Slaughtering several souls seems without a fault.

"Who is here so valiant for a duel?", I bawled;

"The man who posed this question", they called.

"ME?" yelled I, lamenting on my fate,

My perpetual foe till the doom's date.

"Don't trample upon me!" quoth I, with a scream;

Blessed is my fate, it's just a horrendous dream.

***

Not just a dream, now I suppose;

"Why?" all readers may oppose,

A gossamer with a spider lays beside me,

Compelled me to break down the dream and see.

Author's Note

Weird and coward! :D

Reviews

[Andrea Greene]

This is really very interesting, considering you expanded a dream into a grand and entertaining story, with an amazing rhyming sequence and many quotable instances. My only question is why you decided to recolor certain quotes from the text, such as "who is here so valiant for a duel" and others. I would suggest keeping everything the same color, unless there's an artistic decision behind it, just for the sake of comprehension. Otherwise, this is a lovely, witty poem!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot for your wonderful review.
I recoloured them in order to highlights all the conversations.

[Breadwinner]

I agreed with some readers that you should lessen the use of too many colour fonts as it strain the eyes...But your poem pale the radiance and I like the fantasy you drawn here...creepy spiders are always a subject of abhorrence for me...Well written.

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot. I'll take care.

[Najam Us Saher]

Very believable and agreeable dream. Loved the description and rhyming above all.
Is this dream real?

[Raj Sahu]

The dream was virtually real for me. Thank you for your beautiful words.

[Najam Us Saher]

Okay. You're welcome.

[PoeticBlindness]

I name this work a ‘horror comedy'. While reading it I felt as I am watching ‘Courage: A Cowardly Dog Show'. (A cartoon series of 90's)
This is a good work. My laughter is your prize for this work.

[Raj Sahu]

Yes, It's my favourite cartoon. Still when it telecast on T.V., I watch it with utmost interest. Thank you for comparing my poem with such a legendary cartoon.

[Earl Schumacker]

Hi Raj,

Very well done. I read a few of your poems. You do a nice job of creating emotional dramatic images with your story/poetic style. Keep up the good work. Have a great day. Earl

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot dear! Greetings from here!

[Anjali]

Interesting... You made us travel this adventure and it was quite cool... It is very interesting.. nice work!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you for your words!

[Anjali]

you're welcome!

[peter Duggan]

Hey Rag, what a great poem you have written here. You
made his dream come out so very real. How coukd I not enjoy this wonderful write. Iy is beautifully written, my friend, well done....peter

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much dear Peter. It would be so kind of you if you spell it Raj, which means 'to rule' and not rag.

[Chris Shaw]

Not a fan of spiders, even tiny ones, but this was a fantasy thriller, so I read it and enjoyed, knowing I was perfectly safe. An entertaining read. Thank you.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I chuckled at this one , entertaining and quite literal without being absurd, well done, good read.

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot!

[Coyote Poetry]

A wonderful and wild ride in the words. You made the reader believe the spiders are near. Thank you Raj for sharing the entertaining poetry.
Coyote

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot Coyote!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.