War: A Threat to Humanity

This poems narrates a story and conveys a message to the people against war.

There was a kind man,

Soft and noble his soul was!

Before his eyes was a clear goal,

To recruit in army for a particular cause.

He wished to experience the scene,

The scene of the massive war!

So excited he was from the first day,

As the bitter reality was too far.

The day arrived with a bright sky,

Brighter was the man's curiosity.

He got ready with full of zeal,

Unaware of the war's brutality.

Standing steady at the frontier,

Holding his sword like a thunder bolt!

Both armies broke down at once

And suddenly the man came to a halt.

The bright sky puffed into cloud,

A cloud full of groaning dust.

Recklessly the bodies were falling down

And the war tragedy was at must.

 Bloody, bloody the battlefield was,

Filled with innumerable heads.

Screams and shrieks were just common

But there were none from death beds.

On a courageous path, the soldiers followed,

Each carrying a brave brave heart.

But on looking at the massacre scene,

The kind man astonished on his part.

Slowly, slowly the man comprehend

The cruelty of the massive war.

He bent on his knees at the once

And threw his sword very far.

He raised his eyes to heaven,

And cried in a very loud voice;

"Is this the humanity, my Lord?"

A sudden silence spread over noise.

At horizon a beautiful bird crossed,

The beautiful bird came out as a Dove.

Carrying the serenity over her wings,

Along with the message of peace and love.

The bloody sky lost down its lust

And a whiteness smeared all around.

The Dove seems like a messenger of God;

Sent down when he heard the cry and sound.

With her long and charming wings,

She covered the entire field.

The kind man was fully surprised

As a soldier gets his protective shield.

In a moment of vision, the field vanished,

A Dreamworld took its place.

The Dove took the kind man there

And there was a comfort on his face.

The Dove quoth to the man,

"Be kind, be peaceful or unless you will fall,

For God has made you people 

To praise him and love all."

The kind man understood the very message,

He swore to practice peace and harmony.

To walk long and preach all these,

Became his life-long ceremony.

 

Reviews

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Wow- amazing- you are so right- God is a kind loving God but he allows justice to prevail on His grounds and conditions- live one another- war never did good and man lost in the ways of the flesh being more harm than good- we given our own wills need to choose right- great words love the dove and the spiritual connotation used here- God is amazing🌹

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot dear! My hearty reverence to your honourable words.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Such kind words- always a pleasure🌹

[BlackPrince]

This is a wonderful poem beautifully written with picturesque imagery and precise and relevant rhymes with rhythm and flow and love and truth, outlining the evil and futility of war.

WELL DONE

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot!

[Author Gus]

Disclaimer: I disagree with your premise. A world in which the kind men and women reject war is a world that speaks German. I say this because it creates bias in my review.

Grammatically the poem is difficult to follow in places. "To recruit in army for a particular cause" was particularly distracting. I understand that you wanted it to be a broad statement inclusive of all soldiers anywhere in the world, but it just feels clunky and out of place. Knowing that this would be a controversial piece, perhaps the emotion behind the writing got in the way of a proper edit. And while all of that is a bit harsh, there are things I liked about the poem. I appreciate anybody who is willing to share in their faith. I also liked the capitalization of 'Dove' as it is traditional to capitalize God and the dove was the symbol of God in the poem.

[Raj Sahu]

Opinion differs from head to head! Anyways thank you for your comment!

[John the Baptist]

I do not understand why a kind man would want to experience war in the first place.

[Raj Sahu]

To serve to his motherland and fellow people and to glorify the nation!

[Chryiss]

You have an interesting style of writing that is succinctly and quietly bold. However, I think "To recruit in army for a particular cause," 'in' is supposed to be 'an'.
I liked the use of color to create mood and highlight the only words spoken in this poem. It's true that the threat to humanity is our very selves. It lies in war, but it also lies in our vices to compete, judge, gain, and order others for our own needs, wants, and feelings.
Last of all, I liked the use of story to convey your message.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

ahh i have read this before lol this is still in mine eyes a truly wonderous brilliant poem, thanks again for entering into another of my comps good luck thanks

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much.

[Onlyme]

You spoke profoundly and so magnificently. What powerful message. via your poem. About peace, love and war. As well as god.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much.

[Akki]

WOW!
I really like your poem. I was imagining the scene of war that you carved through this poem. It was really great piece of your writing. The more I read and I really like your style of wriitng.

My fev. :
The day arrived with a bright sky,
Brighter was the man's curiosity.
He got ready with full of zeal,
Unaware of the war's brutality.

Thanks and keep writing!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot! 😊

[Nipplegrinder]

Provocatively presented. This is a fine piece. There are wonderful juxtapositions and truthful questioning.

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot! 😊

[Arya Aradhana Routray]

This poem is actually awesome and provides a great message to the society

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you.

[Harley Quinn]

Love it! Very great writing. Can''t wait to read more of your work. :) :) :)

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much.